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《4》晓松来报道

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晓松
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Posted: 2007-11-22 18:02:01 Post subject: 《4》晓松来报道

人气很旺。靠前点儿坐，挨着Lake~

hepingdao
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Posted: 2007-11-22 18:07:36 Post subject:

欢迎兄弟你的前后左右全是美女看你如何正襟危坐 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

晓松
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Posted: 2007-11-22 20:44:15 Post subject:

我可能要分散精力~

kokho
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Posted: 2007-11-23 02:41:36 Post subject:

。这里男士　吃香，有请　晓松把电话发到我的讯息箱里，也注明你接电话的方便时间。作业和问题讨论，都是我打电话到　参加者进行讨论的　：）谢谢　。。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

Lake
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Posted: 2007-11-23 15:24:31 Post subject:

晓松快过来坐好。平时上课我是聚精会神的，只是到考试的时候就忍不住东张西望。喜欢 team work. _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

kokho
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Posted: 2007-11-24 15:25:10 Post subject:

. 热烈欢迎　晓松　帅哥。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

kokho
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Posted: 2007-11-24 15:25:56 Post subject:

。晓航　诗友　看看挂顶贴　：）作业来了　。。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

晓松
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Posted: 2007-11-26 18:27:31 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

《5》第一个作业，余光中的成名诗，是关于大陆两岸的。

《5.1》请大家，把这首诗找出来，我们来谈诗歌结构。放在作业簿。

《5.2》大家也可以选择，自己读过的最好的，有关评论文章1篇，放在作业簿。

《5.3》大家以同样的格式，换一个题材，写一首习作。
我会打电话，讨论你的习作。你改写后，才把你的作品，贴到这个贴后面。

先把诗放在作业簿上。
以同样的格式，换一个题材，写一首习作，我得想想，然后再发。

乡愁
——余光中

小时候
乡愁是一枚小小的邮票
我在这头
母亲在那头

长大后
乡愁是一张窄窄的船票
我在这头
新娘在那头

后来啊
乡愁是一方矮矮的坟墓
我在外头
母亲在里头

而现在
乡愁是一湾浅浅的海峡
我在这头
大陆在那头

白水
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Posted: 2007-11-26 19:15:13 Post subject:

晓松, 你就作我们古韵的课代表. 别忘了拐俩个靓MM过来喔加油

kokho
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Posted: 2007-11-27 10:29:13 Post subject:

。晓松　诗友，给你推荐一下。。看看　ange_mcy　悟性很高　：）　　几乎看不到　余光中的影子了。看看　孤独牧牛　余光中的味道很浓，　但是那份小女人的家庭幸福　很渲染的！看看　勿妄言　　的内容评论　很精彩独到　：）看看　半溪明月　的技术评论　很完整　：）看看　月挂星空　还把　另外３个名家的　乡愁也发出来了。。。这次，我真的是天上掉下一个林妹妹。。　让我抛砖引玉了！。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

kokho
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Posted: 2007-11-27 10:33:14 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

晓松, 你就作我们古韵的课代表. 别忘了拐俩个靓MM过来喔
加油
singer

可爱的白水　谢谢你来热闹　：０

礼尚往来　我先过去那里　请几个过来　：）

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晓松
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Posted: 2007-11-29 18:53:26 Post subject:

kokho推荐的几位学友贴子都看过了，的确不错，很又启发。按照《乡愁》的格式，依葫芦画瓢，习作一首，他写乡愁，我写欢乐。《欢乐》孩提时欢乐是一枚小小的糖果虽然甜的短暂却是无忧无虑学生时欢乐是一只放飞的风筝虽然自由自在却是常受约束再后来欢乐是一瓶浓郁的二锅头虽然滋味苦涩却是乐此不疲而现在欢乐是一张发黄的照片虽然偶尔翻出却是往日记忆交卷了，望多指教。

半溪明月
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Posted: 2007-11-29 19:33:45 Post subject:

学习晓松的作业~

Lake
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Posted: 2007-11-29 21:30:13 Post subject:

偷看一眼，觉得这首迄今为止模仿得最像。学习了。 _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

kokho
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Posted: 2007-12-03 03:08:30 Post subject:

。开始　评论　：）。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

晓松
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Posted: 2007-12-12 19:29:52 Post subject:

其他朋友的评论很精彩、全面，我没有更新的评论内容。就先学习了。

晓松
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Posted: 2007-12-12 19:35:31 Post subject:

kokho的总结厚重、深刻，辛苦了。我待好好学习，慢慢消化。谢谢对我写的诗的评论~

全乐吧
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Posted: 2007-12-13 14:53:43 Post subject: 妙对

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全乐吧
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Posted: 2007-12-30 01:22:46 Post subject:

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晓松
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Posted: 2008-01-04 15:56:28 Post subject:

谢谢全乐吧！祝你新年再上新台阶！

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