The Aroma of Apples - In Memory of Steve Jobs

2011-10-13 10:24:54

The Aroma of Apples
-In Memory of Steve Jobs

Six and fifty autumns,
when once again, multicolored leaves
strewn on the ground, the sky
turns spacious and generous,
inhaling a breath of sweetness
you announce your final journey -
a sudden, graceful fall
leaving an apple a nice curvy bite.
What crunching!

纪念史蒂夫•乔布斯

五十六年的春秋
当色彩斑斓的树叶又一次
点缀大地，天空
变得格外宽容空阔
吸入最后一口甜蜜的空气
你宣布你旅程终点的到来 ——
突然，却优雅地落地
苹果上留下一口优美的弧线。
嘎吱一声！

Steve Jobs (February 24, 1955 – October 5, 2011)
苹果公司的创始人之一，于2011年10月5日去世，享年56岁。一直想写篇东西表达对他的尊敬，惭愧的是对他了解不多，但是听了他在斯坦佛大学的讲话，非常感动，没想到他曾经去求学过禅。我想我可能对他的人格更钦佩。

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Six and fifty autumns,
when once again,

multicolored leaves strew
the ground, the sky turns

generous, inhaling a breath
of sweetness

you announce your final journey -
a sudden, graceful fall

leaving an apple
a nice curvy bite.

What crunching!

10/13/2011

作者	留言
Lake	I like this. I might change "spacious" to "wide" in L2, largely for rhythmic purposes. In L5, "of sweetness of air" seems a tiny bit overmuch with the two "of\'s" in close succession. I might rephrase as "a sweet breath of air." I\'m not sure I fully "get" whether this is about an apple, or whether the apple is a metaphor for a human being, and, if it is about a human being, whether the human is the narrator in self-reflection or some other person. Fred
Lake	The Aroma of Apples Six and fifty autumns, when once again, multicolored leaves strew[n on] the ground, the sky turns spacious and generous, (I might choose one or the other since they are both a bit abstract. I think I would go for "generous" like so: generous, inhaling a breath of sweetness [of air] you announce your final journey - a sudden, [yet] graceful fall leaving an apple a [nice] curvy bite. What crunching! I enjoyed this lovely seasonal rendering Loon. Please take or toss in the barrel. I do love apple poems.... emuse

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Lake

I like this.

I might change "spacious" to "wide" in L2, largely for rhythmic purposes.

In L5, "of sweetness of air" seems a tiny bit overmuch with the two "of\'s" in close succession. I might rephrase as "a sweet breath of air."

I\'m not sure I fully "get" whether this is about an apple, or whether the apple is a metaphor for a human being, and, if it is about a human being, whether the human is the narrator in self-reflection or some other person.

Fred

Lake

The Aroma of Apples

Six and fifty autumns,
when once again,

multicolored leaves strew[n on]
the ground, the sky turns

spacious and generous, (I might choose one or the other since they are both a bit abstract. I think I would go for "generous" like so:

generous, inhaling a breath
of sweetness [of air]

you announce your final journey -
a sudden, [yet] graceful fall

leaving an apple
a [nice] curvy bite.

What crunching!

I enjoyed this lovely seasonal rendering Loon. Please take or toss in the barrel. I do love apple poems....

emuse

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