柿子
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Location: 中国河南商丘职业技术学院大一
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 Posted: 2007-09-29 22:28:49 Post subject: 原创七绝<<七七所思>> |
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盈盈波雾起云闲，
明凉秋河盘织山。
百里遥望不问岁，
万年悲思泪河斑。
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晓松
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| Posted: 2007-09-30 08:35:44 Post subject: |
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| 心到、意到，格律未到，七绝要讲平仄的，不过，高中生能写出这样的诗还是不错的，继续努力~ |
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戴玨
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柿子
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| Posted: 2007-10-01 19:11:51 Post subject: 谢谢 |
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谢谢朋友，这就是我写诗歌遇到的最大障碍啊。
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敦智
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| Posted: 2007-10-05 08:38:14 Post subject: |
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| 不必着急，慢慢来。格律必竟是个死东西，像数学公式一样，记下就得了。 |
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