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黄吉元
童生

Joined: 04 Apr 2007
Posts: 27

黄吉元Collection

Posted: 2007-09-21 20:31:13 Post subject: 首）

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白水
大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection

Posted: 2007-09-21 20:43:58 Post subject:

不错的一组. 更喜欢第二首. 可以说很喜欢只是这一句"一个人举不起指针的刀剑"中的"刀剑"二字似破坏了整首诗歌韵味的协调. 不知改为:"一个人举不起时针"是不是好点? 己见, 不妥见谅.

半溪明月
榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760

半溪明月Collection

Posted: 2007-09-21 21:49:08 Post subject:

他只能坐在春天下凡的阶梯渴望爱情像一滴药水，滴入睡眠学习黄哥的诗歌，最近写了不少哈～

迪拜
同进士出身

Joined: 31 Oct 2006
Posts: 1588

迪拜Collection

Posted: 2007-09-22 01:15:18 Post subject:

〈午夜两点〉写的很好〈狐狸〉里，“是狐狸，不是狐狸”太纠缠，读者根本搞不清，作者大概希望有“新概念”味道其实，清晰一点，更好。

沙漠
秀才

Joined: 26 Jan 2007
Posts: 977
Location: 中国温州
沙漠Collection

Posted: 2007-09-22 03:17:31 Post subject:

我也喜欢第二个. _________________ 个人博客http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1056295180

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