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五绝秋荷

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Posted: 2007-07-23 01:20:14 Post subject: 五绝秋荷

烟雨水天同，荷残夏梦空。藕花香散尽，清露泣香红。

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Posted: 2007-07-23 01:23:57 Post subject:

这是一首嵌名戏作。因觉文友烟雨诗《赠清露泣香红》中，对“清露泣香红”五字有错误解读，故回此诗。

暗香如沁
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Posted: 2007-07-23 06:56:47 Post subject:

二三句有些雷同．浅见．荷本就是藕花．结句有味，浅见问好． _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/axrq用寂寞谱写最美的舞曲~

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Posted: 2007-07-23 08:19:44 Post subject:

hello my friend ) .. _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-07-23 15:38:36 Post subject:

喜欢尾句. 问好

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Posted: 2007-07-23 19:00:54 Post subject:

暗香如沁 wrote:

二三句有些雷同．浅见．荷本就是藕花．结句有味，浅见问好．

谢暗香指教。不过我认为，荷在这里主要指荷叶，“留得残荷听雨声”这句诗中的残荷肯定不是指荷花，而是指荷叶，因此这两句没有雷同。

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Posted: 2007-07-23 19:05:37 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

hello my friend Smile

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谢问候！

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Posted: 2007-07-23 19:10:59 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

喜欢尾句. 问好

谢白水喜欢，不过，尾句不是我的，现成的借用，前面讲了这是嵌名诗。呵呵

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