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七绝 和柳上惠姜伯约九伐中原
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PostPosted: 2009-01-31 10:59:36    Post subject: 七绝 和柳上惠姜伯约九伐中原 Reply with quote

七绝 和柳上惠姜伯约九伐中原

丞相北征匡汉室,姜维仿效动川兵。
循规蹈矩无新路,军在出奇计在精。


诸葛一生唯谨慎。“东和孙权,北拒曹操”在赤壁之战联吴破曹时是很正确的战略方针。但刘备得蜀以后,让关羽“占荆州,和东吴”是很难同时兼得的,故有关羽之走麦城之败。“六出祁山”(历史上是五出),重复老路,不用魏延分兵出子午谷的奇谋,太过谨慎,不肯冒险,所以不能出奇制胜,北伐战略目标就很难实现了。当年韩信,暗渡陈仓,出敌不意,方能取胜,才奠定汉室江山,也为刘邦作了“嫁衣裳”。

孔明、姜维先后北伐中原,以弱击强,但孔明循规蹈矩姜维因循守旧,始终不肯冒险出奇兵,结果打成消耗战,使蜀汉国力逐渐更加衰弱,终归一事无成,令人感慨。但两人始终忠于蜀汉,锲而不舍的精神令人钦佩。反观后来邓艾攻蜀,仅几千兵士,且无马匹、后勤及援军,竟然可以翻山越岭孤军深入,冒险长途奔袭,迫使10多20万成都守军投降,简直不可思议。军事上出奇兵就象高风险投资,风险高但回报也高。军事上不能冒险出奇不意,难成大业。

柳上惠原玉:
七绝 姜伯约九伐中原
暗渡陈仓前有村,中原九伐泪纵横。
丹心正似峨嵋月,夜夜清辉照蜀城。
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PostPosted: 2009-01-31 13:30:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

藉典赋诗,妙!!
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PostPosted: 2009-01-31 13:57:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

白云闲人 wrote:
藉典赋诗,妙!!

谢白云兄雅评!诗里出现两个“蜀”字,我把“蜀相”改为“丞相”,如何?
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PostPosted: 2009-01-31 14:07:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

古韵觅旧,妙!
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PostPosted: 2009-01-31 18:41:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

连南河 wrote:
古韵觅旧,妙!

谢连兄雅赏!
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PostPosted: 2009-02-01 05:57:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

按图索骥无新路,军在出奇计在精

好悟 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2009-02-01 06:57:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

修饰后,免两蜀出现,更精炼!
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PostPosted: 2009-02-01 07:16:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢两白兄!
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PostPosted: 2009-02-02 00:04:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏唱和。拜赏!

个人更喜欢原唱之转结。
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PostPosted: 2009-02-02 08:11:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

王君明 wrote:
欣赏唱和。拜赏!

个人更喜欢原唱之转结。

谢君明兄雅评!
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PostPosted: 2009-02-03 14:35:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

提赏.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-03 17:55:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢野航兄雅赏!
原来用“蜀兵”,后经诗友提醒发现“蜀”是第三声仄声,出律了,故改为“川兵”以和律。“北伐”的“伐”今声为平声,古韵为仄声,故改为“北征”,以和古韵。
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PostPosted: 2009-02-03 18:20:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

简约,而又巧妙富哲思。
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PostPosted: 2009-02-04 08:06:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
简约,而又巧妙富哲思。


谢冰清老师雅赏!

略作修改如下:
丞相北征匡汉室,姜维仿效动川兵。
循规蹈矩无新路,军在出奇计在精。

孔明、姜维先后北伐中原,以弱击强,但孔明循规蹈矩姜维因循守旧,始终不肯冒险出奇兵,结果打成消耗战,使蜀汉国力逐渐更加衰弱,终归一事无成,令人感慨。但两人始终忠于蜀汉,锲而不舍的精神令人钦佩。反观后来邓艾攻蜀,仅几千兵士,且无马匹、后勤及援军,竟然可以翻山越岭孤军深入,冒险长途奔袭,迫使10多20万成都守军投降,简直不可思议。军事上出奇兵就象高风险投资,风险高但回报也高。军事上不能冒险出奇不意,难成大业。
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