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时光的旅途
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PostPosted: 2007-05-08 00:52:05    Post subject: 时光的旅途 Reply with quote

我刚刚被黎明从梦里唤醒
睁开眼睛所看到的一切
都在渐渐苏醒并开始
感受时光经过的这次旅途
这样平凡的旅途每天都会存在
不过今天是最详细地一次感受
顺便我在我的本子上
落些某时某天的标记
以便让我在整理时光的脚步时
有头有尾

不过这次感受的对象有很多
像天
感受阳光和它肌肤相触的感受
特别是在此刻
天刚亮的时候
有风 有鸟 有树叶
人都陆陆续续睁开眼睛
如果我们感受不到
这一刻存在的重大意义
那还谈论什么情感
属性的理论呢
的确如此

如果我是天
我会在晨辉中多停留片刻
这样让我有足够的时间
应付时针分针秒针紧促的来访
也不是它们非要让我和它们一起
经过这次旅途
而是这个世界的一切
必须这样经过
不是我非得纪录某时某天的标记
而是我所能代表的生命印记
唯有这些才能留下
一些根本最深处的标记

我不但留下天感受时光
经过的这次旅途
还留下了天下所有
生命旅途的一次见证
如果这一切都无情感
那么天便不会出现四季分明
刮风下雨突晴忽暗
春夏秋冬

假设我是天假设我是地
我是鸟 是树 是草 及阳光
溪流 等等一切的一切
我会选择最明媚的阳光
最蓝的天色
最白的云最柔和的风
最最清澈的水
但这一切的选择都不及
我在为它们散布一次谎言
或者编写一篇荒唐神话的故事
以便迷惑毫无感知的笔墨
文字

这是多么可耻的一次旅途
我不得不推翻原本的标记
看着浑浊失去天色的黎明
那双污浊苍茫昏暗的眼睛
仿佛落在纸上的病人
在我放下笔
合起本子时
关上疲惫的眼睛
天黑了又亮了
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PostPosted: 2007-05-08 01:49:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

独特的诗风。。。


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PostPosted: 2007-05-08 05:27:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

个人感觉可以简洁些.
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PostPosted: 2007-05-08 20:38:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

娓娓续续写出你自己,感情的内在线索起伏有特色
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PostPosted: 2007-05-08 21:02:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

这是多么可耻的一次旅途
我不得不推翻原本的标记
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