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五绝-落梅
莹雪
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PostPosted: 2007-04-05 19:29:15    Post subject: 五绝-落梅 Reply with quote


娇梅剩晚容,伴雪落严冬。
欲别群芳去,明年色更浓。

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不亦悦乎
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 12:03:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

“欲”字改用“暂”如何?
记得MM擅长写意而不用其字的,我以为这次“梅”字也可避免。
恕直言,别生气喲。
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莹雪
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 17:19:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

不亦悦乎 wrote:
“欲”字改用“暂”如何?
记得MM擅长写意而不用其字的,我以为这次“梅”字也可避免。
恕直言,别生气喲。
呵呵!我不是气球,没有那么多气的。 sticking tongue
谢谢GG提建议哈!我觉得“欲”,是要落,未落之意。“暂”吧,有些生硬。所以“欲”字我还是暂且保留。那个“梅”字吧,当避则避,不当避呢就不用避了。写意,也不是让人弄不懂呀!以上是我的浅见,GG听后别见怪哦! thanks
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王君明
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 18:33:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

转结很好啊
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梅影三叠
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PostPosted: 2007-04-06 22:35:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

结尾不伤,问好莹雪
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莹雪
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PostPosted: 2007-04-07 00:26:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

王君明 wrote:
转结很好啊
谢谢!
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莹雪
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PostPosted: 2007-04-07 00:28:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

梅影三叠 wrote:
结尾不伤,问好莹雪
谢谢梅影!问好梅影
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杏仁儿
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PostPosted: 2007-04-09 03:44:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

明年色更浓。好句~~
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PostPosted: 2007-04-09 16:50:13    Post subject: Reply with quote

杏仁儿 wrote:
明年色更浓。好句~~
谢谢!
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