莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
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不亦悦乎 童生
Joined: 02 Apr 2007 Posts: 40
不亦悦乎Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-06 12:03:15 Post subject: |
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“欲”字改用“暂”如何?
记得MM擅长写意而不用其字的,我以为这次“梅”字也可避免。
恕直言,别生气喲。 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-06 17:19:33 Post subject: |
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不亦悦乎 wrote: |
“欲”字改用“暂”如何?
记得MM擅长写意而不用其字的,我以为这次“梅”字也可避免。
恕直言,别生气喲。 |
呵呵!我不是气球,没有那么多气的。
谢谢GG提建议哈!我觉得“欲”,是要落,未落之意。“暂”吧,有些生硬。所以“欲”字我还是暂且保留。那个“梅”字吧,当避则避,不当避呢就不用避了。写意,也不是让人弄不懂呀!以上是我的浅见,GG听后别见怪哦! |
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王君明 秀才
Joined: 03 Apr 2007 Posts: 250 Location: 甘肃天水 王君明Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-06 18:33:26 Post subject: |
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转结很好啊 _________________ 虚拟网络 真实生活 |
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梅影三叠 秀才
Joined: 06 Feb 2007 Posts: 203
梅影三叠Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-06 22:35:22 Post subject: |
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结尾不伤,问好莹雪 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-07 00:26:44 Post subject: |
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谢谢! |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-07 00:28:10 Post subject: |
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谢谢梅影!问好梅影 |
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杏仁儿 童生
Joined: 22 Mar 2007 Posts: 30
杏仁儿Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-09 03:44:36 Post subject: |
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明年色更浓。好句~~ _________________ 观静水之深沉,品智者之无声 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2007-04-09 16:50:13 Post subject: |
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谢谢! |
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