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东方进行时（组诗）

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Posted: 2013-04-04 18:43:50 Post subject: 东方进行时（组诗）

东方进行时文/风墙 1.猫步一只山猫走着猫步昂首，自信自己走的路意淫在东方管弦乐中一块石头踢破山猫的后脚兽医摇头说后退步，别忘了身后的石头 2.梦小河里挤满了人河水，缓缓地流两只白唇鹿，一公一母纵身向前一跃，却昂面向后翻倒满身是猎狗的牙齿带着破碎的梦，回到远古 3.天狗坠下渡口有很多船月亮，几盏灯火有人把脚扛在肩上因为，一不小心突如其来的冰就把脚冻伤星光里一群老鼠从地洞里飞出跃过渡口，飞向银河啃食月亮天狗坠下 2012.8.19草，2013.4.5修改 _________________ 墙漏风了

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Posted: 2013-04-04 23:02:32 Post subject:

两只白唇鹿，一公一母纵身向前一跃，却昂面向后翻倒满身是猎狗的牙齿带着破碎的梦，回到远古

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Posted: 2013-04-05 11:27:22 Post subject:

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两只白唇鹿，一公一母谢谢朋友！
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Posted: 2013-04-05 11:33:39 Post subject:

后退步，别忘了身后的石头

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Posted: 2013-04-05 11:37:07 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

后退步，别忘了身后的石头

哈哈，同感。
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Posted: 2013-04-06 08:41:24 Post subject:

有滋有味的诗，欣赏。问好。祝福蛇年，万事如意。 _________________ 一个来自南京，普通大众中的人。

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Posted: 2013-04-06 09:19:26 Post subject:

欣赏。 “有人把脚抗在肩上 ”中“抗”字？ _________________ 名心退尽道心生，如梦如仙句偶成。天籁自鸣天趣足，好诗不过近人情。 ———清张问陶 http://www.yizitong.org/weblog.php?w=397

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Posted: 2013-04-08 11:42:59 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

后退步，别忘了身后的石头

谢谢朋友鼓励！向您学习！
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Posted: 2013-04-08 11:45:18 Post subject:

杯中冲浪 wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

后退步，别忘了身后的石头

哈哈，同感。

谢谢朋友鼓励！向朋友学习！继续努力！
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Posted: 2013-04-08 11:47:01 Post subject:

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有滋有味的诗，欣赏。问好。祝福蛇年，万事如意。

谢谢朋友鼓励!请多指导！
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Posted: 2013-04-08 11:49:36 Post subject:

一无 wrote:

欣赏。

“有人把脚抗在肩上 ”中“抗”字？

谢谢一无朋友指点，应是“扛”子，已改。以后请多指教！
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