Maple Review :: View topic

	Chinese Literature Society of North America \| Maple Review \| Immigrants in Canada \| Angel Studio \| The Driftwood Artist Society \| Ocean of Poetry \| Island of Music "HuaHe Cup" 2007 Chinese Mainland and Oversea Poetry Competition and Non-governmental Magazines and Newspapers Joint Exhibition starts on the first day of 2007.
	FAQ Search Memberlist Usergroups Register Profile Log in to check your private messages Sign in Blogs Weblogs News Album



Dictionary Check Poems' Rules & Forms Search for Chinese Poems Poetry & Music

Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌

树

刘华明
童生

Joined: 13 Mar 2007
Posts: 75

刘华明Collection

Posted: 2007-04-14 02:51:41 Post subject: 树

树不动树记录下风的形状和哭声南来的北往的无家可归的纷纷脱掉方言落入虫鸣中鸟儿开始攀岩阳光的绳索不停地晃动他必须在乌云到来前紧紧抓住抓住绿叶的心跳抓住一滴雨留下的体温不是每个影子都能坚守原来的位置河水漫过堤岸、原野像条狗一样尾随而来夕阳也转过脸去撕毁了对一株向日葵的承诺一棵树早早地收拾行装眺望着去往远方的路

杨海军
进士出身

Joined: 01 Mar 2007
Posts: 2205
Location: 吉林
杨海军Collection

Posted: 2007-04-14 03:04:26 Post subject:

不是每个影子都能坚守原来的位置河水漫过堤岸、原野像条狗一样尾随而来夕阳也转过脸去撕毁了对一株向日葵的承诺一棵树早早地收拾行装眺望着去往远方的路不错！！祝好！！！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

杯中冲浪
进士出身

Joined: 29 Sep 2006
Posts: 2891
Location: 中国
杯中冲浪Collection

Posted: 2007-04-14 16:34:45 Post subject:

句子还可以，但没有形成整体形象，破碎感。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

Display posts from previous:

Emoticons





View more Emoticons

Page 1 of 1 View previous topic View next topic

Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌

Once you post your works here, that means you submits them to the magazine of Maple Review (North American Maple, or BeiMeiFeng), a bilingual journal published by Chinese Literature Society of North America. The magazine holds the right to translate them into Chinese, and publish them in both languages. You need to be responsible for the copyright issues of your own files uploaded.
Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group
phpBB Chinese interface was translated by iCy-fLaME