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春从天上来
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PostPosted: 2012-01-22 18:26:08    Post subject: 春从天上来 Reply with quote

春从天上来·擎鼓笔,续琴声

几焕银屏。恰兴好同游,快慰穷生。
朝出云锦,玉露零零。
柔润悟了淳诚。
看山泉流淌,邃深处、又见苕亭。
似玄关。有阳关曲韵,能抚能听!

休言短词尺素,向意悦波清,尘外心盟。
管鲍襟期,惠庄鱼辩,友谅唯识温馨。
撷三香精气。擎鼓笔、相续琴声。
待刘灵。
让醉怀双橘,恁自惺惺。


春从天上来 调见《中州乐府》吴激词。双调一百四字,前段十一句六平韵,后段十一句五平韵。

此调以吴激词为正体:

春从天上来

中仄平平韵 仄仄仄平平句 中仄平平韵
中仄平仄句 中仄平平韵
中仄仄仄平平韵
仄平平平仄句 仄中仄读 仄仄平平韵
仄平平句 仄平平仄仄句 中仄平平韵

平平仄平中仄句 仄仄仄平平句 中仄平平韵
中仄平平句 中平平仄句 中仄中仄平平韵
仄平平平仄句 平中仄读 中仄平平韵
仄平平韵
仄仄平平仄句 平仄平平韵
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PostPosted: 2012-01-22 18:37:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

新春愉快 Very Happy
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黄洋界
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PostPosted: 2012-01-22 19:04:56    Post subject: Reply with quote

咏春大手笔,春温拂面来。词丰意远,让在下细细品味。
祝新春愉快!
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笑聊
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PostPosted: 2012-01-22 23:48:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好冰清老师,新春快乐!

读此佳词,有手痒之感,冰清老师可否把该词谱贴来?大家一起新春唱和一番可好?
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PostPosted: 2012-01-23 03:32:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

朋友们过年好!
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PostPosted: 2012-01-24 02:46:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
新春愉快 Very Happy

Laughing 念念!
祝新春吉祥顺意。
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冰清
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PostPosted: 2012-01-24 02:49:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
咏春大手笔,春温拂面来。词丰意远,让在下细细品味。
祝新春愉快!

谢黄兄雅意。祝你新春吉祥,阖家幸福。
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PostPosted: 2012-01-24 02:58:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

影沉寒水 wrote:
朋友们过年好!

笑聊 wrote:
问好冰清老师,新春快乐!
读此佳词,有手痒之感,冰清老师可否把该词谱贴来?大家一起新春唱和一番可好?
...

谢二位鼓励问候!

“大家一起新春唱和一番可好?”——笑版好主意!

春从天上来 调见《中州乐府》吴激词。双调一百四字,前段十一句六平韵,后段十一句五平韵。

此调以此词为正体:  

海角飘零 叹汉苑秦宫 坠露飞萤 梦里天上 金屋银屏 歌吹竞举青冥 
中仄平平韵 仄仄仄平平句 中仄平平韵 中仄平仄句 中仄平平韵 中仄仄仄平平韵

问当时遗谱 有绝艺 鼓瑟湘灵 促哀弹 似林莺呖呖 山溜泠泠 
仄平平平仄句 仄中仄读 仄仄平平韵 仄平平句 仄平平仄仄句 中仄平平韵

梨园太平乐府 醉几度春风 鬓发星星 舞彻中原 尘飞沧海风雪万里龙庭 写秋笳幽怨 
平平仄平中仄句 仄仄仄平平句 中仄平平韵 中仄平平句 中平平仄句 中仄中仄平平韵 仄平平平仄句
人憔悴  不似丹青  酒醒醒  对一轩凉月  灯火青荧 
平中仄读 中仄平平韵 仄平平韵 仄仄平平仄句 平仄平平韵
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PostPosted: 2012-01-24 22:12:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

问候冰清老师春节好!问候北美枫师友们春节好!

临屏依韵虔诚礼佛和冰清老师《春从天上来》:

正月天晴,恰数九寒流, 礼佛虔诚。一路祥瑞,默诵经文,胸纳四海空灵。
眼观新联对,渡佳节、爽快娱情。劝人人、觉应和气待,世态清清。

良心当中才好,又苦修何妨?记得芽萌。疏影虬枝,雪霜欺辱,墙角独自孤形。
念阿弥陀佛!无冬夏、环宇能行。大光明,普照人间日,乾道飞升!

注:初三天晴好日。余年年前往苏州西园礼佛。余觉得人人都怀着善意好心,则世道清平祥和矣!故以《春从天上来》调填制,以增节日氛围!
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PostPosted: 2012-01-26 07:19:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
问候冰清老师春节好!问候北美枫师友们春节好!
临屏依韵虔诚礼佛和冰清老师《春从天上来》:

正月天晴,恰数九寒流,礼佛虔诚。一路祥瑞,默诵经文,胸纳四海空灵。
眼观新联对,渡佳节、爽快娱情。劝人人、觉应和气待,世态清清。

良心当中才好,又苦修何妨?记得芽萌。疏影虬枝,雪霜欺辱,墙角独自孤形。
念阿弥陀佛!无冬夏、环宇能行。大光明,普照人间日,乾道飞升!

注:初三天晴好日。余年年前往苏州西园礼佛。余觉得人人都怀着善意好心,则世道清平祥和矣!故以《春从天上来》调填制,以增节日氛围!
...

笑聊君好和。临屏依韵,纵思倾笔,既飞洒自如,又寄意言外。佩服。谢谢!

几点小建议,待斟酌:
“默诵经属文韵;“良心中才好”;“又苦何妨?”中之当、修,平仄似不符。

祝福新春!
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PostPosted: 2012-01-27 00:11:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:
问候冰清老师春节好!问候北美枫师友们春节好!
临屏依韵虔诚礼佛和冰清老师《春从天上来》:

正月天晴,恰数九寒流,礼佛虔诚。一路祥瑞,默诵经文,胸纳四海空灵。
眼观新联对,渡佳节、爽快娱情。劝人人、觉应和气待,世态清清。

良心当中才好,又苦修何妨?记得芽萌。疏影虬枝,雪霜欺辱,墙角独自孤形。
念阿弥陀佛!无冬夏、环宇能行。大光明,普照人间日,乾道飞升!

注:初三天晴好日。余年年前往苏州西园礼佛。余觉得人人都怀着善意好心,则世道清平祥和矣!故以《春从天上来》调填制,以增节日氛围!
...

笑聊君好和。临屏依韵,纵思倾笔,既飞洒自如,又寄意言外。佩服。谢谢!

几点小建议,待斟酌:
“默诵经属文韵;“良心中才好”;“又苦何妨?”中之当、修,平仄似不符。
...


谢谢冰清老师赏评!
提的几点建议都接受,没有好好斟酌,是不严谨。这里做些修改:1,文,改为:默诵悲经。悲,大悲咒经。
2,当,平仄两读,当中应读平声。改:摆。良心摆中才好。
3,修,平声。改:度。
还请冰清老师帮我在跟帖里改正。
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PostPosted: 2012-02-01 15:55:34    Post subject: Reply with quote

好玩儿,步韵学一首 Laughing

笑动山屏。适酒湿萤辉,雪月交生。
水袖飘转,钗佩丁零。浑似散尽芹诚。
或冰弦轻弄,解情慧、巧识心亭。
倚墙邻,偶轻盈细语,没个人听。

无妨雾中云里,任眩眼频移,衔取欢盟。
石漱流泉,灯羞游影,争忍吹细梅馨。
问清香俱好,言不尽、分付新声。
醉魂醒。伫曲阑干外,难揣谁惺。

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PostPosted: 2012-02-01 17:25:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

海蛎子醉笔和新词,别开生面,用词造句,得心应手。欣赏!
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PostPosted: 2012-02-03 04:39:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
这里做些修改:1,文,改为:默诵悲经。悲,大悲咒经。
2,当,平仄两读,当中应读平声。改:摆。良心摆中才好。
3,修,平声。改:度。
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谢谢笑聊君。已珍藏我博客了!
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PostPosted: 2012-02-03 04:49:34    Post subject: Reply with quote

海蛎子 wrote:
好玩儿,步韵学一首 Laughing

笑动山屏。适酒湿萤辉,雪月交生。
水袖飘转,钗佩丁零。浑似散尽芹诚。
或冰弦轻弄,解情慧、巧识心亭。
倚墙邻,偶轻盈细语,没个人听。

无妨雾中云里,任眩眼频移,衔取欢盟。
石漱流泉,灯羞游影,争忍吹细梅馨。
问清香俱好,言不尽、分付新声。
醉魂醒。伫曲阑干外,难揣谁惺。


哈哈,抛砖引玉。开心! Laughing
谢谢海蛎子。珍藏在我博客了!
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