影沉寒水
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Joined: 16 Feb 2010
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Location: 中国福建
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 Posted: 2010-09-15 04:26:03 Post subject: 七律•傍晚海边踏沙有感步韵明月饰窗（新韵） |
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七律•傍晚海边踏沙有感步韵明月饰窗（新韵）
匆匆几度染黄沙，旭日夕阳感岁华。
十载似风云散梦，双丸如弹泪倾颊。
流星知我心河汉，明月缠身醉鹿崖。
每叹尘屐寂履处，推窗且看水边霞。
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白云闲人
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Joined: 26 Aug 2007
Posts: 3466
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| Posted: 2010-09-15 06:08:12 Post subject: |
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寄情于诗,情景交融!
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诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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qinghongh
榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007
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| Posted: 2010-09-15 08:24:22 Post subject: |
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| 结句甚美。 |
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黄洋界
探花
Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 3301
Location: 多伦多,加拿大
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| Posted: 2010-09-15 17:08:18 Post subject: |
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踏沙而行,遐思无限.
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宁家珍
秀才
Joined: 20 May 2009
Posts: 470
Location: 中国黄山
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| Posted: 2010-09-15 20:40:38 Post subject: |
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欣赏佳作，问好寒水诗友。 |
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影沉寒水
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Joined: 16 Feb 2010
Posts: 1145
Location: 中国福建
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| Posted: 2010-09-16 04:12:06 Post subject: |
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问好师友们
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笑聊
探花
Joined: 05 Jan 2010
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Location: 中国江苏无锡
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| Posted: 2010-09-16 04:23:02 Post subject: |
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| 好诗学习。欣赏结句！尾联出句似可凝练。 |
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