亿七维
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 Posted: 2010-05-22 09:03:01 Post subject: 心中太阳照亮前程 |
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岁月朝朝催人老，
鸿鹄之志闯过几关山头
山一程，水一程
风谷雨纷纷 雪村冰冷冷
不曾阻挠马飞奔
梦中铁马踏过千座万座冰城
铁马昂首朝天问
鸿鹄之志不是燕雀黄梁梦
浑身是胆满身伤痕
梦中铁马追赶日月星辰
心中太阳照亮前程
前程前程又近一程 |
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白云闲人
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| Posted: 2010-05-23 07:20:33 Post subject: |
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全首貫通著一股勇往向前的不屈不撓的精神!
請教:七维你这三首是古诗还是新诗还是詞呢?最好能标悉一下,以便相互交流!
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诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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亿七维
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| Posted: 2010-05-24 05:09:54 Post subject: |
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| 俺只是初学，还不能分析出属于哪一类诗，。 |
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白云闲人
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| Posted: 2010-05-24 08:09:26 Post subject: |
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初学能有如此诗意,好!
七維,古诗有古诗的韵律,詞有詞牌的格律,纵覌你幾首诗的运笔和节拍,应属新诗的手法.
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诗中岁月,
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亿七维
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| Posted: 2010-05-24 08:17:54 Post subject: |
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| 多谢指点。问好白云闲人 |
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白云闲人
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| Posted: 2010-05-24 08:22:50 Post subject: |
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七維不用客气,相互多交流,生活乐优悠!
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亿七维
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| Posted: 2010-05-24 08:54:43 Post subject: |
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| 文来墨往常交流，生活清悠更悠悠 |
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