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PostPosted: 2010-04-28 22:08:38    Post subject: 清平乐 Reply with quote

东风懒蠹,眠意来无据。
斜照牙床人未寤,梦魂知他何处。

春光好道多情,和梦里正沉吟。
百花台上缤纷,醒来日已西沉。
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PostPosted: 2010-04-29 04:34:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏渔樵耕读美词!顺便交流。

梦魂知他何处。通平平平平仄?至少第二字“魂”应该是仄声。百花台上缤纷,仄平平仄平平。词谱应是:中仄中平中仄。

以上个见,如有不妥,敬请海涵!
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PostPosted: 2010-04-29 09:02:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

春归何处, ○○⊙▲(仄韵) 寂寞无行路。 ⊙●○○▲(协仄韵) 若有人知春去处, ⊙●⊙○○⊙▲(协仄韵) 唤取归来同住。 ⊙●⊙○⊙▲(协仄韵) 春无踪迹谁知, ⊙○⊙●○△(换平韵) 除非问取黄鹂。 ⊙○⊙●○△(协平韵) 百啭无人能解, ⊙●⊙○⊙●(句) 因风飞过蔷薇。 ⊙○⊙●○△(协平韵)
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PostPosted: 2010-05-01 00:59:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

东风懒蠹,眠意来无据。
○ ○ ⊙▲ ⊙● ○ ○▲
斜照牙床人未寤,梦魂知他何处。 魂
⊙● ⊙○○⊙▲ ⊙● ⊙○⊙▲

春光好道多情,和梦里正沉吟。
⊙○⊙● ○ △ ⊙○⊙● ○ △
百花台上缤纷,醒来日已西沉。 花 上 纷
⊙● ⊙○⊙ ● ⊙ ○ ⊙● ○ △

春光好道多情,和梦里正沉吟。 情(第十一部)吟(第十三部)
醒来日已西沉。 沉(第十三部)


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