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晚归
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PostPosted: 2009-08-16 04:00:18    Post subject: 晚归 Reply with quote

晚归



久客归时少,

庭槐今宵见。

浮世随兴去,

风云时有眠。

满目芳草色,

一抹夕阳烟。

老屋丹桂落,

家门月常圆。
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PostPosted: 2009-08-16 17:06:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

紧扣“晚归”二字,写出了黄昏故园景,道出了游子回归情。
问好!
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PostPosted: 2009-08-16 17:29:14    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢阅读与评论。初学古体诗,望多指教。
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PostPosted: 2009-08-16 19:39:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

“家门月常圆。”真名言警句。欣赏问好!
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PostPosted: 2009-08-17 06:15:07    Post subject: Reply with quote

游子盼望月常圆。
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PostPosted: 2009-08-18 04:29:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

米运刚 wrote:
“家门月常圆。”真名言警句。欣赏问好!

感谢先生的厚爱。
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PostPosted: 2009-08-18 04:31:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

qinghongh wrote:
游子盼望月常圆。


感谢先生阅读。
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PostPosted: 2009-10-20 14:46:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣賞:

浮世隨興去,風云有時眠.

好在"家門月常圓."
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PostPosted: 2009-10-20 18:28:00    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏佳作,问好张先生。
收藏、备用。

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PostPosted: 2010-02-01 19:39:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

sfiawong wrote:
欣賞:

浮世隨興去,風云有時眠.

好在"家門月常圓."

先生说的正是。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-01 19:41:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

又一方天 wrote:
欣赏佳作,问好张先生。
收藏、备用。
感谢先生的阅读与收藏。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-01 19:47:00    Post subject: Reply with quote

家门月常圆。佳句,欣赏!问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-02 19:21:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

张南城 wrote:
[b]晚归



久客归时少,
庭槐今宵见。
浮世随兴去,
风云时有眠。
满目芳草色,
一抹夕阳烟。
老屋丹桂落,
家门月常圆。
问好!大作类似古风式五律(五言拗律),颈联对仗工稳,颔联似对非对(颔联要求不严,甚至不对也可),唯觉平仄韵混押不宜。据我所知,“见”字只读作仄声。[/b]
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