Idea. ( 灵 感 ) 十四行.

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( 灵 感 )
这是英文十四行 (如要翻译,要化一些功夫.)

Suddenly something’s not be sure, but flash in my mind;
They're flashing seemed make my eyes blind;
What're they which I want to find;
They like candle lights that shined.

When I understand I would put down works behind;
they’re something’s hidden deeply in my soul refine;
these just the power of creation looked by mankind;
Oh! Why you like to play seek and hide?

You are the elements that made my jobs not being signed;
When found, I would keep them to be wined;
Try to collect them all to-gather and twined;
they wouldn't be wasted to be declined.

I would try my best think them more inspirited.
The materials in my mind become ideal creation.



灵 感

突如其来闪进脑海
差点令我眼儿张不开
噢就是我要找的东西
如亮烛光一般的可爱

我即会意到将工夫放低
你隠在脑深处熔炼
你是那种创造的力量
噢,為何好似捉迷藏?

因為没你却令我停步
你来了我会把你精炼
收集起来挍作一团
用尽你来為我创造

遏力思考你的好处
你的材料必成理想的创造
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[戴玨]

這英語把我看的！得借助譯文才明白想說什麼。
且不管韻律節奏，應先把意思說清楚點，例如：

Something suddenly flashed in my mind;
Its flashing almost made my eyes blind;
It's just the thing I wanted to find,
And it was like candle light that shined.

為配合shined，都用了過去時。
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