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[原创]十六字令－风
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PostPosted: 2007-02-05 23:38:11    Post subject: [原创]十六字令－风 Reply with quote
　　
一、
风，吹遍神州万物青。
疏云雾，迎日碧空晴。

又、
风，肆虐飞沙逐面迎。
难回避，奋力向前行。
三、
风，舞絮苍茫绘玉莹。
残冬尽，馨透冷芳凝。
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PostPosted: 2007-02-06 01:54:13    Post subject: Reply with quote
欣赏。很有韵味
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PostPosted: 2007-02-06 02:59:44    Post subject: Reply with quote
較喜歡第一首，
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PostPosted: 2007-02-06 19:36:39    Post subject: Reply with quote
暗香如沁 wrote:
欣赏。很有韵味

谢谢jj点评！
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莹雪
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PostPosted: 2007-02-06 19:40:54    Post subject: Reply with quote
戴玨 wrote:
較喜歡第一首，
谢谢关注！
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PostPosted: 2007-02-08 01:41:26    Post subject: Reply with quote
俺再进来学习。 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-02-08 02:27:00    Post subject: Reply with quote
有一點想說一下，十六字令第一字好像應該押韻的。換句話說如果用風字開始，整首詞得押一東和二冬。
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PostPosted: 2007-02-08 18:54:05    Post subject: Reply with quote
戴玨 wrote:
有一點想說一下，十六字令第一字好像應該押韻的。換句話說如果用風字開始，整首詞得押一東和二冬。

说得对。我只想改变一下。
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