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轻轻地,狠狠地
红袖添乱
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PostPosted: 2009-06-05 20:19:51    Post subject: 轻轻地,狠狠地 Reply with quote

我会一直一直这样
蘸着伤口的血,倔强的泪
轻轻地,狠狠地
写下去。。。

以自由飞翔的灵魂
以歌唱,呢喃,倾诉
以飞鸟的快乐,落花的幸福,海浪的淋漓
以文字,音符,数字,结绳的形式

轻轻地,狠狠地
写对生命的爱
直到最后日子来临,写尽生命
甚至写好我的墓志铭和告别的祷文

因为我拥有的太多,太好!
我要把决堤的幸福留下
把微笑的写意留下

我的江湖没有刀剑
倦航之后,我有臂弯如港
还有至高的自由
不歇的灵魂
无畏的笔
和反骨!

于是我就这样一直一直
轻轻地,狠狠地
写下去。。。

有时我在河边捡石头
也会贪玩的忘记归家
还有,在我心疼的时候
也会停顿下我的故事
轻轻蹙几下眉
比如那次梅花落尽
比如那天他一声轻叹

但一切只是缘起缘落
小小的沉浮不是借口

只要紧紧攥住
美的那张底牌----善良!
我会一直一直
轻轻地,狠狠地
写下去。。。
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荷梦
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PostPosted: 2009-06-05 22:10:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

矛盾的,深情的,执着的...
但感觉最行一行去掉会更有余味.
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PostPosted: 2009-06-06 05:54:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

改了,我也早就觉得是,写的太仓促。正好这里改


谢荷荷
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PostPosted: 2009-06-06 08:54:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

某个时点,妳总得猜猜,陪着妳的是谁?
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PostPosted: 2009-06-06 09:36:08    Post subject: 猜不出来 Reply with quote

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:
某个时点,妳总得猜猜,陪着妳的是谁?

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PostPosted: 2009-06-06 10:17:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

这个写得很好,应是一气呵成的吧。不然读来,怎如此自然流畅~~
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PostPosted: 2009-06-07 18:33:10    Post subject: 是,通常我写都是一口气写完,就发了。5分钟热度 Reply with quote

上城 wrote:
这个写得很好,应是一气呵成的吧。不然读来,怎如此自然流畅~~


过了那个热度,就提不起笔来了
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PostPosted: 2009-06-07 22:08:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

我是天空里的一粒落尘
偏偏飘落,到你的诗社
你的红袖无情的一扬
我又爬上城墙,荷梦江湖
毫毛点墨可立刀剑
如何方可那个,大江洋而不
添乱?嗯,年反骨叫叛逆
的反骨叫性格
的反骨大概是超越
再过来,缥缈红尘,寻石墓志
(乱写一通,借此地问好诸位) Wink
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PostPosted: 2009-06-08 23:54:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

博弈 wrote:
我是天空里的一粒落尘
偏偏飘落,到你的诗社
你的红袖无情的一扬
我又爬上城墙,荷梦江湖
毫毛点墨可立刀剑
如何方可那个,大江洋而不
添乱?嗯,年反骨叫叛逆
的反骨叫性格
的反骨大概是超越
...


太油菜
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PostPosted: 2009-06-09 01:43:53    Post subject: 幸福的人儿。 Reply with quote

红袖添乱 wrote:
诗盗喜裸评 wrote:
某个时点,你总得猜猜,陪着你的是谁?

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PostPosted: 2009-06-10 17:02:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

很轻很狠很善良很美好
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