非马
秀才
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非马北美枫文集 |
 发表于: 2009-04-01 05:28:54 发表主题: 吊带 THE GREAT SUSPENDERS SUSPENSE |
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吊带
整个世界
就靠它
这么
吊
著
会不会
会不会什么时候
啪哒一声它突然绷断
让幕
直直落下来
把台上
一出未经排练的
哑剧
（再来一个！再来一个！）
曝光
THE GREAT SUSPENDERS SUSPENSE
the whole world
depends on
it
will it
will it snap
and let fall
the curtain
exposing
(Bravo! Bravo!)
an unrehearsed
ACT
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Lake
举人
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非马先生的诗歌一向以小见大，从诗歌中也可一窥作者的胸怀。
Though I like the sound of "suspenders suspense" in the title, just wondering if the title can be shortened like the Chinese version. I also feel the long title gives out too much info. Just a thought. Not a biggie.
Enjoyed, thanks.
Lake
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非马
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非马先生的诗歌一向以小见大，从诗歌中也可一窥作者的胸怀。
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Hi Lake. I think you are right. The title does give away a bit too much. I'll just use "Suspenders" as the title.
Thanks!
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William Zhou周道模
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read, thanks!
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