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疯狂的性事，是最后的春天
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PostPosted: 2007-01-22 06:56:49    Post subject: 疯狂的性事，是最后的春天 Reply with quote
举起自己



重重的

摔死



一千年后



一个青年

在荒原

寻找自己




五月的花

开得灿烂一片

疯狂的性事

是最后的春天
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PostPosted: 2007-01-22 21:18:14    Post subject: Reply with quote
构思不错

疯狂的性事: 来得太突兀
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PostPosted: 2007-01-22 22:27:06    Post subject: Reply with quote
呵呵，谢谢品鉴。

花朵绽放，是雄蕊和雌蕊的性事，春天，是几万万个汹涌的花朵的幸福和高潮。这是一个双关，联想。
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PostPosted: 2007-01-22 22:41:40    Post subject: Reply with quote
我是说,

重重的
摔死

和后面有什么必然的联系呢
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PostPosted: 2007-01-23 00:08:13    Post subject: Reply with quote
生动有力，跨度大。

前段是性的压抑与释放，后一节是疯狂后感受以及由此产生的主观幻觉。

错觉，两小节的联系稍显突兀。

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PostPosted: 2007-01-24 20:37:11    Post subject: Reply with quote
司马的感觉很敏锐阿，呵呵
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PostPosted: 2007-01-24 20:51:31    Post subject: Reply with quote
拜读　问好　 Cool Laughing
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