一树摇风
童生
Joined: 15 Nov 2006
Posts: 37
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 Posted: 2006-12-22 07:01:00 Post subject: 小儿无赖 |
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儿子饿了
一个劲地嚎啕
吃饱后
咯咯地笑起来
我坐在台灯小小的光圈里
聆听他的无赖 就像
聆听窗外
冬夜一脸漆黑的童稚
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和平岛
举人
Joined: 25 May 2006
Posts: 1277
Location: Victoria, Canada
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| Posted: 2006-12-22 15:56:28 Post subject: |
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不错的对比
圣诞节快乐
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白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2006-12-26 07:41:40 Post subject: |
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形象, 生动
新年好 |
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kokho
进士出身
Joined: 30 Nov 2006
Posts: 2642
Location: Singapore
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| Posted: 2006-12-26 12:06:27 Post subject: |
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拜读 节日快乐
 
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乒乓、摄影、诗歌 |
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nobody
进士出身
Joined: 31 Dec 2006
Posts: 2651
Location: Madtown
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| Posted: 2007-01-06 12:06:29 Post subject: |
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喜欢喜欢很喜欢。
后面，深刻得再无痕迹一点就更好了。特别是最后一句。
因喜欢，又追看了以前的，看到了“天真”。个人感觉也是前面很好，后面有痕迹。
不过总体，留下很深印象。学习了。
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