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咏金沙江(两题)
金沙浪子
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PostPosted: 2008-10-17 15:00:14    Post subject: 咏金沙江(两题) Reply with quote

咏金沙江 之一

你的江南折
我坐定你的卵石
我坐定你的河床
我坐定你生命的岸

你的山明净
你的山
用深幽的海蓝撒向我
你的风北吹
让我无法张开南望的眼
你的水开一朵朵洁白的莲花
莲子的痛
在哗哗裂响的团花深处

你给我力,给我无尽的时空
白昼走了,长夜走了
只留下沉睡的卵石
我也是卵石中的一只
我无法睡下
你的风透着清冽和冷

你对岸的河床被浪涛劈开
你的日头还要西斜
坐定你的河,坐定你的冷
你的冬天让一切静静地躺下


咏金沙江 之二

我的来,你没有准备
你没有丝毫准备
要不咋会没有鸟声
鸟是我与你同父异母的兄弟

我的来,你没有过警觉
你没有丝毫警觉
要不你的风咋还要吹
你的风卷起的河沙涡旋弥眼
我无法看清
你冬天的容颜惟冷寂苍苍

我的来,你无法阻止
你无力作出阻止
要不那些固体的水纹
咋又昂首挺立不断上升
我踩你的沙滩
踩着你时空的无序
踩着我日里夜里难已熄灭的痛
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PostPosted: 2008-10-17 16:43:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

语言朴素.描述客观.但可挖掘些感悟的东西出来.
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PostPosted: 2008-10-17 16:47:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

深度上还可挖掘.
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