曲元奇
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 Posted: 2008-10-03 17:24:46 Post subject: 如幻入化最好 |
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不要走近
从远处看一个轮廓
一块石头
就是一尊佛
什麽都看明白
会沮丧 ，会彷徨 ，会说
不 ，不是这样
会莫名其妙的大哭一场
从太空传来一张照片
凸凸凹凹的
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曲元奇
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| Posted: 2008-10-03 17:28:40 Post subject: |
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【如幻如化】 怎麽成了入化？
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白水
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| Posted: 2008-10-03 17:47:32 Post subject: |
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| 哲理, 生动. 欣赏 |
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曲元奇
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| Posted: 2008-10-04 21:56:25 Post subject: |
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谢谢 白水老师
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nobody
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| Posted: 2008-10-04 22:02:17 Post subject: |
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很有想象力。引人入胜。
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阿依琼裙
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半溪明月
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| Posted: 2008-10-05 01:51:21 Post subject: |
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不要中间那段会更好～中间的太实，其实前后两段已经诗意明确了！个见！
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