zhangmin
秀才
Joined: 13 Mar 2007
Posts: 450
Location: 中国.江苏.张家港
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 Posted: 2008-09-13 22:33:14 Post subject: 诗歌，刀刃上的舞蹈 |
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一滴泪，在手心里
无法干涸，任指尖阡陌
每一片落叶，成了季节的命脉
斑斓一生
风拽起诗人的笔，为秋果
咏叹，在大唐盛世醉倒
血在喉咙里倒流，口吐莲花
墙角凄风滚落，如刀片
飞过睫毛，如娇娘
擂鼓，横跨圆狐，捕捉
剑客的使命，戏弄
清风幽影
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风走过，灯灭了，黑夜里你的烟雾尘埃在我的眼泪里。月光下的影子总为屋檐下的风铃疗伤。 |
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nobody
进士出身
Joined: 31 Dec 2006
Posts: 2651
Location: Madtown
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| Posted: 2008-09-14 01:10:55 Post subject: |
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热烈有力。问好中秋。
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I'm nobody! Who are you? |
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半溪明月
榜眼
Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 4760
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| Posted: 2008-09-14 01:37:54 Post subject: |
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| 诗风在变，句式短小有力～ |
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赵福治
探花
Joined: 30 May 2006
Posts: 3456
Location: 中国北京
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| Posted: 2008-09-14 04:48:45 Post subject: |
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每一片落叶，成了季节的命脉
斑斓一生
.....精练. |
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zhangmin
秀才
Joined: 13 Mar 2007
Posts: 450
Location: 中国.江苏.张家港
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| Posted: 2008-09-14 19:25:14 Post subject: |
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谢谢点评，远握朋友，问好。
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风走过，灯灭了，黑夜里你的烟雾尘埃在我的眼泪里。月光下的影子总为屋檐下的风铃疗伤。 |
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