拈花微笑 秀才
Joined: 21 Jan 2008 Posts: 311
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Posted: 2008-09-12 06:59:37 Post subject: 月下写诗 |
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月光如纸
我在上书写了几行
就被浮云擦去
没有人知道
那是一首快乐的
抑或伤感的诗
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-09-12 07:35:17 Post subject: |
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嫌短了点,这意境很想扩大。 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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悠子 举人
Joined: 04 Jan 2008 Posts: 1383 Location: US 悠子Collection |
Posted: 2008-09-14 08:50:52 Post subject: |
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卖这么大的关子,按袖子的说法
罚你罚你 |
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苏茉儿 秀才
Joined: 31 Dec 2007 Posts: 739
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Posted: 2008-09-15 08:20:13 Post subject: |
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月光如纸
我在上书写了几行
就被浮云擦去
心事,随风而去。。。 _________________ 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。 |
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