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鸟儿的啼鸣

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Posted: 2008-06-12 17:10:08 Post subject: 鸟儿的啼鸣

清晨鸟儿的啼鸣掠过树梢穿透沙帘惊醒甜甜的梦轻轻地走近穿柩撩开沙帘的一角哦窗外的树枝上有两只栖息的鸟儿正在深情的对望叽叽喳喳是它们缠绵的絮语委婉的情怀啁啁啾啾是它们不尽的倾诉低声的呢喃哦一曲动听的乐章在此刻奏响一幅唯美的画面展现在眼前 ...... 后记;清晨,酣梦中的偶被一阵阵鸟儿的欢笑声惊醒,目睹此情此景,遂有感而发,寥寥几笔...... _________________ 天边云一朵苍海粟一粒云儿朵朵随风飘粟儿粒粒满山崖

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Posted: 2008-06-12 21:29:28 Post subject:

惊醒甜甜的梦.

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Posted: 2008-06-13 16:13:53 Post subject: 回复

赵福治 wrote:

惊醒甜甜的梦.

谢谢朋友欣赏点评!
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Posted: 2008-06-13 17:48:58 Post subject:

诗意可婉转些表达,诗贵在意会.

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Posted: 2008-06-13 18:07:15 Post subject:

赵福治 wrote:

诗意可婉转些表达,诗贵在意会.

谢谢老师指点迷津!学子谨记心中...

周末愉快!问好!
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Posted: 2008-06-13 18:27:25 Post subject:

最喜欢这两行叽叽喳喳啁啁啾啾 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-06-14 07:26:58 Post subject: 回复

nobody wrote:

最喜欢这两行

叽叽喳喳

啁啁啾啾

谢谢朋友欣赏点评!问好!
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Posted: 2008-06-14 07:50:58 Post subject:

很温馨的诗歌

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Posted: 2008-06-16 07:22:16 Post subject: 回复

[quote="白水 Moonlight"]很温馨的诗歌[/quote] 朋友过奖了,向您学习哦! 谢谢点评!问好! _________________ 天边云一朵苍海粟一粒云儿朵朵随风飘粟儿粒粒满山崖

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