雨时 童生
Joined: 25 Apr 2008 Posts: 78
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Posted: 2008-05-05 01:43:02 Post subject: 老 歌 |
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你的名字
是一首很久未唱的老歌
偶然不经意地想起
那一幕从前忽又闪现
地铁站上人来车往
对面的目光哟
把我顷刻点燃 |
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半溪明月 榜眼

Joined: 30 Sep 2006 Posts: 4760
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Posted: 2008-05-05 03:54:50 Post subject: |
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对面的目光哟
把我顷刻点燃
精悍,轻巧的诗歌~ |
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雨时 童生
Joined: 25 Apr 2008 Posts: 78
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Posted: 2008-05-10 17:23:40 Post subject: |
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| 多谢半溪明月君赏光!欢迎常来指教。 |
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nobody 进士出身
Joined: 31 Dec 2006 Posts: 2651 Location: Madtown nobodyCollection |
Posted: 2008-05-10 18:05:10 Post subject: |
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写得短小刺激。哈哈。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you? |
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雨时 童生
Joined: 25 Apr 2008 Posts: 78
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Posted: 2008-05-12 05:30:11 Post subject: |
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| 过誉了!多指教! |
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