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PostPosted: 2007-10-04 20:10:39    Post subject: 山里的孩子 Reply with quote

山里的孩子

平湖? 平湖是波澜不惊的美人
一张沉甸甸的面具
血脉不通的躯体
早已载不动 太多虚妄的沉痼
闪电在夜幕中
颤抖手术台银白色的小刀
我突然感到心疼
金属与金属的碰撞和蜷缩在病榻上
沮丧的你

其实, 谁都知道
抑郁的乳房, 痛至极至的期盼
不过婴儿干渴的唇
温软的吮吸 或者
一双柔嫩的小手轻轻的触摸
让一切顺其自然
比如开闸
放水 让神女洁白的裙裾幻化成
天鹅美丽的翅膀 何必
截断巫山云雨?

如果, 岩石的破碎和鱼的泪水同样无法避免
我宁愿大江东去
为你, 我的
唐古拉山 今晚
就让我依偎在你的胸前 翕动
焦虑的唇

(为三峡大坝而作)
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PostPosted: 2007-10-04 20:57:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

我突然感到心疼
金属与金属的碰撞和蜷缩在病榻上
沮丧的你
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PostPosted: 2007-10-04 21:00:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

有精彩之处
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PostPosted: 2007-10-04 21:11:55    Post subject: Reply with quote




美丽的母爱 祖国的诗歌 :)

这首 白水写得意境开阔,史诗的味道 !!!

赞 !


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PostPosted: 2007-10-05 01:44:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

现代味浓,要多读几遍,“山里的孩子”是诗中的那个“你”吗?
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PostPosted: 2007-10-05 05:39:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

William Zhou周道模 wrote:
现代味浓,要多读几遍,“山里的孩子”是诗中的那个“你”吗?


问好周. "山里的孩子"是诗歌中的"我", 同时我希望也是生活中的你,我,他还有她..........
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PostPosted: 2007-10-05 06:32:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

对环境的一种忧郁~问好白水!
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PostPosted: 2007-10-05 18:04:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

就让我依偎在你的胸前 翕动
焦虑的唇.欣赏!问好!
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 05:36:11    Post subject: Reply with quote

杯中冲浪 wrote:
我突然感到心疼
金属与金属的碰撞和蜷缩在病榻上
沮丧的你


谢谢理解
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 05:39:09    Post subject: Reply with quote

和平岛 wrote:
有精彩之处


谢谢"之处". 说明还有修改余地.这类诗歌的确不是我的强项, 思索深度不够. 沉淀一段再说吧. Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 05:45:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho wrote:



美丽的母爱 祖国的诗歌 :)

这首 白水写得意境开阔,史诗的味道 !!!

赞 !



谢谢KOK鼓励.史诗绝不敢当. 那日被绿党成员激了一下, 又读了些新闻和有关资历, 想了很多, 但还是没写出深层的感受. 感性东西多了, 理性东西少了. 这也是我写诗歌的弱点. 沉淀一段再说吧.
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 05:46:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

半溪明月 wrote:
对环境的一种忧郁~问好白水!


谢谢理解. 问好.
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 05:49:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

宣城田斌 wrote:
就让我依偎在你的胸前 翕动
焦虑的唇.欣赏!问好!


谢谢理解. 个人的声音是弱小的. 希望更多一些声音.问好
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 06:02:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

袭击的痛感!
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 06:09:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水什么时候到山里走了一趟,还好么?
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 06:14:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

阿依琼裙 wrote:
袭击的痛感!

谢谢理解. 是痛! 这是我前两天回诗友的帖:

"最近安省在竞选省议员, 为了更多的了解我们在加拿大的生存环境,我参加议员竞选的义工队伍。那天走在派发传单的路上被一绿党竞选者拦住, 大讲环保,质问我们为子孙后代留下了什么不说, 还指责中国的环境污染. 我恨不能一太极拳砸他那大鼻子上。虽然我承认他的很多观点是对的."

作为孩子, 是听不得外人指责母亲的. 可从另一方面来看, 哪个孩子不为自己深爱的母亲的病灶而痛?
只是我还没有能力把这种感觉深层的发掘出来. Embarassed
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 06:17:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

伤城 wrote:
白水什么时候到山里走了一趟,还好么?

诗人, 你也去走走, 找找感觉, 相信你们会写的比我好些Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 06:41:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

会的。可不是现在。出去会大病一场的,还是少出去的好。
把自己关在家里面,什么人都不见的好。
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 07:01:51    Post subject: Reply with quote

http://tianjinzhouyu.blog.hexun.com/6032268_d.html
这个链接刚看。觉得没有什么意思。一者:长江里的白鳍豚(还是中华鲟?),
美丽的长江女神已永远消失了;二者:三峡大坝不是倾注了三代领导人的心血吗?
《三峡好人》我没看过,光看名字,寓意很深。又想中国人都是好人,非常好的善良人,
岂止三峡?激动人心必然伴随怅惘失落,何必呢?他们都是伟人的丰功伟绩!
“如果我以肮脏的绩业去堵塞岁月的通道,
那么就有人称我为比一春天还无聊的家伙。”(洛夫诗)


倘若我难再登临,
梅树依旧不门旁;
莫忘君者是流泉,
盛况其时花怒放。
(不知道出去的诗)
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PostPosted: 2007-10-06 07:20:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

伤城 wrote:
http://tianjinzhouyu.blog.hexun.com/6032268_d.html
这个链接刚看。觉得没有什么意思。一者:长江里的白鳍豚(还是中华鲟?),
美丽的长江女神已永远消失了;二者:三峡大坝不是倾注了三代领导人的心血吗?
《三峡好人》我没看过,光看名字,寓意很深。又想中国人都是好人,非常好的善良人,
岂止三峡?激动人心必然伴随怅惘失落,何必呢?他们都是伟人的丰功伟绩!
“如果我以肮脏的绩业去堵塞岁月的通道,
那么就有人称我为比一春天还无聊的家伙。”(洛夫诗)


倘若我难再登临,
梅树依旧不门旁;
莫忘君者是流泉,
盛况其时花怒放。
(不知道出去的诗)


或许你有一定道理, 我们小小老百姓急也是白搭.
可我不得不谈自己的感受. 那绿党成员拉着我问, "你有孩子吗? 我有, 我们要给孩子留下什么?"而我想到出国前我和我先生在市委大院那城市中不在多有的绿林里散步, 却惊异的看见一个人拿着气枪一只又一只射杀城市里已很少见的白鹭, 我们前去阻止, 那人却说是上级旨意. 原因是鸟粪污染了市委大院的地......仁者, 智者?
好吧, 听你们的. 少出门, 少生病 Wink
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