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【月色之袂】

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半溪明月
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Posted: 2008-03-14 20:03:07 Post subject: 【月色之袂】

【月色之袂】不可避免地，月色沉迷了沉迷于一片树林一条弯弯曲曲，开满花语的小径挤满神秘铁器和榔头的房子所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风的梦呓，摇落枝头的云裳一地月光斑驳,可是他用榔头敲出的爱情谶语？窗帘内的一支烟缭绕着一付蓝色手铐这索命的蓝，你不敢细究享乐的苹果在钟表旁生锈打造铁器的人，为自己打造一把千年的箭如果再晚点，连梦也射穿了谁家的吸尘器共振着你的频率轻飘飘地浮在空中幸福地不能着地

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Posted: 2008-03-14 21:27:51 Post subject:

欣赏好诗歌问好姐姐 _________________ 莞君

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Posted: 2008-03-14 21:41:11 Post subject:

原来我也笼罩在这月色斑驳之间问好！ _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/liuyuechen8

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Posted: 2008-03-14 22:44:36 Post subject: Re: 原来我也笼罩在这月色斑驳之间问好！

Holybolt wrote:

原来我也笼罩在这月色斑驳之间
问好！

多批，问好跃辰～

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Posted: 2008-03-14 22:55:00 Post subject: Re: 欣赏好诗歌问好姐姐

莞君 wrote:

欣赏好诗歌问好姐姐

问好莞君～

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Posted: 2008-03-15 14:45:25 Post subject:

幸福地不能着地是新作吗？ _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-03-15 18:55:37 Post subject:

所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6 风的梦呓，摇落枝头的云裳风v 一地月光斑驳,可是他小 s 用榔头敲出的爱情谶语...................灵动的月色.

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Posted: 2008-03-15 19:25:20 Post subject:

再来品品远握 _________________ 莞君

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Posted: 2008-03-15 19:32:28 Post subject: Re: 幸福地不能着地是新作吗？

nobody wrote:

幸福地不能着地

是新作吗？

呵呵，这是十八岁那年写得～问好ＮＹ！

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Posted: 2008-03-15 19:35:33 Post subject: Re: 所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6 ...

赵福治 wrote:

所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6
风的梦呓，摇落枝头的云裳风v
一地月光斑驳,可是他小 s
用榔头敲出的爱情谶语...................灵动的月色. ...

这样的批语奇特，就是没看懂呢，能解释吗？
问好福治！

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Posted: 2008-03-15 19:37:24 Post subject: Re: 再来品品远握

莞君 wrote:

再来品品远握

谢莞君再来读～问好，远握！

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Posted: 2008-03-15 21:48:50 Post subject: Re: 幸福地不能着地是新作吗？

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

幸福地不能着地

是新作吗？

呵呵，这是十八岁那年写得～问好ＮＹ！

觉得不似近来风格，故有一问。但也没料到那么久远。哈哈。
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Posted: 2008-03-15 22:27:50 Post subject: Re: 幸福地不能着地是新作吗？

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

幸福地不能着地

是新作吗？

呵呵，这是十八岁那年写得～问好ＮＹ！

觉得不似近来风格，故有一问。但也没料到那么久远。哈哈。

开玩笑呢～但不知道是提高了，还是退后了？：）

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Posted: 2008-03-15 23:10:37 Post subject: Re: 幸福地不能着地是新作吗？

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

幸福地不能着地

是新作吗？

呵呵，这是十八岁那年写得～问好ＮＹ！

觉得不似近来风格，故有一问。但也没料到那么久远。哈哈。

开玩笑呢～但不知道是提高了，还是退后了？：）

以前就很好，现在更好了 Laughing

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Posted: 2008-03-15 23:23:45 Post subject: Re: 幸福地不能着地是新作吗？

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

nobody wrote:

幸福地不能着地

是新作吗？

呵呵，这是十八岁那年写得～问好ＮＹ！

觉得不似近来风格，故有一问。但也没料到那么久远。哈哈。

开玩笑呢～但不知道是提高了，还是退后了？：）

以前就很好，现在更好了 Laughing

呵呵，反正你现在是只说好话，听不到批评之声了

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Posted: 2008-03-16 01:24:46 Post subject:

写得越来越好了。问好。 _________________ 我的博客：http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1251343504

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Posted: 2008-03-16 02:15:00 Post subject:

窗帘内的一支烟了B 缭绕着一付蓝色手铐 mz 这索命的蓝，你不敢细究的人享乐的苹果在钟表旁生锈 b2 打造铁以器的人，为自己山打造一把千年的箭 _________________ 点击进入回到拉萨的火车

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Posted: 2008-03-16 03:17:05 Post subject: Re: 所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6 ...

半溪明月 wrote:

赵福治 wrote:

所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6
风的梦呓，摇落枝头的云裳风v
一地月光斑驳,可是他小 s
用榔头敲出的爱情谶语...................灵动的月色. ...

这样的批语奇特，就是没看懂呢，能解释吗？
...

月亮, 这是防盗版. Very Happy

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Posted: 2008-03-16 07:03:06 Post subject: Re: 所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6 ...

白水 Moonlight wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

赵福治 wrote:

所有的枝桠张成拥抱姿势风 6
风的梦呓，摇落枝头的云裳风v
一地月光斑驳,可是他小 s
用榔头敲出的爱情谶语...................灵动的月色. ...

这样的批语奇特，就是没看懂呢，能解释吗？
...

月亮, 这是防盗版. Very Happy

明白了，回到拉萨也是这样的，我引用有时候也多出字母～

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Posted: 2008-03-16 07:26:23 Post subject: Re: 写得越来越好了。问好。

下一个偶像是野兽 wrote:

写得越来越好了。
问好。

谢偶像来读～问好！

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