莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-17 23:30:34 Post subject: 柳含烟-柳 |
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湖边柳,翠芳春。水畔含烟低诉,柔丝自古付离人。劳诗魂。
笛语弄音谁度曲,惹得断肠别绪,不如松柏有精神。见雄浑。
柳含烟四十五字平韵:
唐教坊曲名。《花间集》毛文锡词有“河桥柳,占芳春,映水含烟拂露”句,取为调名。 |
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黄洋界 探花

Joined: 23 Mar 2007 Posts: 3301 Location: 多伦多,加拿大 黄洋界Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-18 08:53:48 Post subject: |
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岁寒知松柏,弱柳付离人,各陈其性,各具其神,
莹雪以为然否? _________________ ++++++++++++++
喜金石书画,友竹菊梅兰 |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2008-04-18 16:55:51 Post subject: |
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弱柳付离人,松柏自雄浑。一柔一刚,相得益彰。 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-19 00:25:10 Post subject: |
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黄洋界 wrote: |
岁寒知松柏,弱柳付离人,各陈其性,各具其神,
莹雪以为然否? |
黄老言之甚善。 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-19 00:29:32 Post subject: |
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qinghongh wrote: |
弱柳付离人,松柏自雄浑。一柔一刚,相得益彰。 |
呵呵,只是想有些对比,才能突出主题。 |
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冰清 同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007 Posts: 1921
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Posted: 2008-04-19 05:01:25 Post subject: |
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湖边柳,翠芳春。水畔含烟低诉,柔丝自古付离人。劳诗魂。
笛语弄音谁度曲,惹得断肠别绪,不如松柏有精神。见雄浑。
"水畔含烟低诉, 柔丝自古付离人"
含情脉脉, 令人怜惜.
刚柔对比出新意, 但转意似乎过激. |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-19 21:32:25 Post subject: |
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冰清 wrote: |
湖边柳,翠芳春。水畔含烟低诉,柔丝自古付离人。劳诗魂。
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谢谢您的点评!问好  |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-04-20 15:51:46 Post subject: |
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整首词意境很好。觉得上下片的末句似有多余之感。一孔之见,不必在意。 _________________ 蜻蜓点水非无意 愁云化雨是有情 |
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莹雪 进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 2520 Location: 中国-辽宁·三燕故都 莹雪Collection |
Posted: 2008-04-21 15:19:01 Post subject: |
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是有缘 wrote: |
整首词意境很好。觉得上下片的末句似有多余之感。一孔之见,不必在意。 |
无妨,谢谢点评! |
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