啥么 秀才

Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 169
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Posted: 2008-03-20 15:46:56 Post subject: 叶子 |
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如果你的手指在每一片树叶穿过
每一片树叶因此有了一种清香
风吹过时
每一片树叶带走一种梦想
每一片树叶因此都值得收藏
但我却宁愿它们四散
飘落到每一条街道
我无论走到哪里,都可以感觉到你
嘻嘻,哈,YAK,不成体统 _________________ 这有点麻烦 |
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-21 06:09:42 Post subject: |
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遗落满地的梦想。 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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悠子 举人
Joined: 04 Jan 2008 Posts: 1383 Location: US 悠子Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-22 07:27:33 Post subject: |
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要是把最后一句删了,好像还可以成体统~ |
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曲元奇 秀才
Joined: 01 Mar 2008 Posts: 427 Location: 山东 曲元奇Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-22 18:37:37 Post subject: |
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写树叶得诗很多我觉得这一首有新意 |
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啥么 秀才

Joined: 10 Jan 2008 Posts: 169
啥么Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-24 08:48:50 Post subject: |
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曲元奇 wrote: |
写树叶得诗很多我觉得这一首有新意 |
谢谢,8好意思,不成体统~ _________________ 这有点麻烦 |
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