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向日葵和我对望

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Posted: 2008-02-20 06:44:48 Post subject: 向日葵和我对望

向日葵和我对望笑满我前面的山岗黄色花瓣的利刃收割我整个夏日的目光这个夏天比任何夏天都热向日葵顶天立地让我羞愧这个网络比所有网络都虚这块土地上播种的爱情一个手势就将它击得粉碎向日葵和我对望她的脸色让我慌张我的肤浅那容易磕开的颗粒被向日葵藏到了牙床而夏日的一场雨从对面的山岗一直淋到我的梦想 2006-7-24 _________________ 溪语的博客:家住鄂西

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Posted: 2008-02-20 07:05:25 Post subject:

构思很巧，且幽默。嗯，这个网络。。。。

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Posted: 2008-02-20 07:25:18 Post subject:

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构思很巧，且幽默。
嗯，这个网络。。。。

谢,可以砍!
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Posted: 2008-02-20 07:32:52 Post subject:

向日葵要向着太阳怒放~

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Posted: 2008-02-20 08:23:07 Post subject:

砍不了，挺好看得。 _________________ 默默无言处，盈盈一笑间。

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Posted: 2008-02-20 11:11:45 Post subject:

灵魂的交流，不会如此脆弱吧~~~ 一个手势就会击碎~~？ 555555~~~ 夏天真是诗季~~~ _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

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Posted: 2008-02-20 14:38:50 Post subject:

谢谢溪语版主来落尘发作品。一个手势将爱情击的粉碎！好功力～ _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2008-02-20 14:42:25 Post subject:

红袖添乱 wrote:

灵魂的交流，不会如此脆弱吧~~~
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红袖，如果溪语版主这首作品的第二段也以（向日葵和我对望）做开头，这就是我说的（抬头）这种技巧。我们常常用，却不知道如何定名称。
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Posted: 2008-02-21 22:41:56 Post subject:

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向日葵要向着太阳怒放~

是的,爱爱!
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Posted: 2008-02-21 22:54:55 Post subject:

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砍不了，挺好看得。

呵,是吗.谢哦!
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Posted: 2008-02-21 22:56:08 Post subject:

红袖添乱 wrote:

灵魂的交流，不会如此脆弱吧~~~
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这大概就是网络与现实生活.
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Posted: 2008-02-21 23:00:00 Post subject:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

谢谢溪语版主来落尘发作品。

一个手势将爱情击的粉碎！好功力～

主要是诗盗兄这里很安逸,来讨杯茶喝.叨扰了.
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Posted: 2008-02-22 09:06:59 Post subject:

黄色花瓣的利刃收割我整个夏日的目光独特而有力，很不错! _________________ 瞠目结舌

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Posted: 2008-02-22 11:59:21 Post subject:

溪语 wrote:

悠子 wrote:

构思很巧，且幽默。
嗯，这个网络。。。。

谢,可以砍!

啊，不能砍~, 就是这个网络 Wink

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