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对联学作之二
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PostPosted: 2008-01-22 05:10:43    Post subject: 对联学作之二 Reply with quote

对联学作之二

【对句】清弹琴瑟胸襟净[梧桐]
【出句】冷落诗书抱负无 [苑眉]

【出句】凝绪眉川流不息 [苑眉]
【对句】蹙愁眼雁杳无期 [梧桐]

【出句】飞天鸡犬乐 [苑眉]
【对句】入洞鼠蛇闲【梧桐】

【出句】飞天鸡犬乐 [苑眉]
【对句】入网鬼神愁【梧桐】

【对句】坐怨红颜老[梧桐]
【出句】眠愁白发生 [苑眉]

【出句】不沾土气拖鞋走 [苑眉]
【对句】却染洋习革履行[梧桐]

【对句】轻描秀色颊间热【梧桐】
【出句】漫扫秋风身后凉 [苑眉]

【对句】朱唇吟出琼英韵【梧桐】
【出句】玉盏盛来琥珀词 [苑眉]
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PostPosted: 2008-01-22 08:16:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

本组对联有的内容不错,如果以工对的要求而言,则有的词性和平仄欠妥,
一般规则要求上联字尾应为仄声,下联字尾应为平声.供你参考.
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PostPosted: 2008-01-22 20:22:27    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
本组对联有的内容不错,如果以工对的要求而言,则有的词性和平仄欠妥,
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谢谢先生批评~问好~~
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PostPosted: 2008-01-27 08:22:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
本组对联有的内容不错,如果以工对的要求而言,则有的词性和平仄欠妥,
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看了以上对联,没有发现出错。
不知以上有哪一联平仄欠妥?烦请老师指点,以供大家学习。
谢谢!
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PostPosted: 2008-01-28 19:56:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好~~
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PostPosted: 2008-01-29 08:37:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

这一组对联,在词性和平仄方面都没有问题,是我误读了,对不起达夫,抱歉!
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PostPosted: 2008-01-29 10:15:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

【对句】清弹琴瑟胸襟净[梧桐]
【出句】冷落诗书抱负无 [苑眉]

【对句】坐怨红颜老[梧桐]
【出句】眠愁白发生 [苑眉]

有哲理, 喜欢.
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PostPosted: 2008-01-29 19:44:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
这一组对联,在词性和平仄方面都没有问题,是我误读了,对不起达夫,抱歉!


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PostPosted: 2008-01-29 19:46:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
【对句】清弹琴瑟胸襟净[梧桐]
【出句】冷落诗书抱负无 [苑眉]

【对句】坐怨红颜老[梧桐]
【出句】眠愁白发生 [苑眉]

有哲理, 喜欢.


谢谢冰清老师鼓励~~问好~~
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