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PostPosted: 2008-01-20 14:32:38    Post subject: 《谢长廷,他在日本说......》 Reply with quote

谢长廷,他去了日本
去了日本
在日本的大学
他,开口说话了
他,用日本语说话了
说他,不是中国人

谢长廷,他去了日本
去了日本
在日本的大学
他,终于说出了
他,不是中国人
他,不是我们台湾人的事实

谢长廷,他去了日本
去了日本

----2008.1.20
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PostPosted: 2008-01-20 20:22:27    Post subject: Reply with quote

日---他妈的本

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PostPosted: 2008-01-20 23:06:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

他,开口说话
他,用日本语说话
说他,不是中国人

谢长廷,他去了日本
去了日本
在日本的大学
他,终于说出

把这几个“了”去掉怎么样?
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PostPosted: 2008-01-22 02:19:25    Post subject: 问候楼上的朋友! Reply with quote

kino 发表于 Posted: 星期日 一月 20, 2008 11:06 pm 发表主题 Post subject:

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他,开口说话
他,用日本语说话
说他,不是中国人

谢长廷,他去了日本
去了日本
在日本的大学
他,终于说出

把这几个“了”去掉怎么样?


----我反复地读了一下,觉得去掉这个"了",味好象变了好多.
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