孙继廷
秀才
Joined: 21 Apr 2007
Posts: 115
Location: 吉林四平
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 Posted: 2008-01-16 01:31:20 Post subject: 书画 |
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黄洋界
探花
Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 3301
Location: 多伦多,加拿大
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| Posted: 2008-01-16 14:40:46 Post subject: |
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三幅小品颇有生活情趣,生动传神,确有功底.在构图上提点意见:两只蟹的位置可偏斜一点,画面留出多一点空白."清品"中的小蘑菇宜稍靠近蔬菜,避免松散.
行书"笔墨千秋"四字,大小长短粗细依形而有变化,章法较好,"笔"字打点,,似无必要.
楷书略显拘谨,基本功尚需加强.
以上一孔之见,仅供参考.我也在学习中,好在有共同爱好,可以互相交流.
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喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰 |
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莹雪
进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006
Posts: 2520
Location: 中国－辽宁·三燕故都
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| Posted: 2008-01-16 15:42:22 Post subject: |
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| 欣赏！ |
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qinghongh
榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007
Posts: 4110
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| Posted: 2008-01-16 18:13:24 Post subject: |
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| 黄老师评价十分中肯。行书胜楷书。 |
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晓松
举人
Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192
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| Posted: 2008-01-16 19:29:33 Post subject: |
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| 继廷兄，久违了。不过士别三日当刮目相看，这次回来不光携诗，还带来书法和绘画，让人顿时耳目一新！尤其喜欢“笔墨千秋”四字，有章有法，疏密有致。只是“秋”字下面四点水，有多余的感觉，字的整体结构布局有待加强。当然，我是外行，凭感觉，不知对不对。 |
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孙继廷
秀才
Joined: 21 Apr 2007
Posts: 115
Location: 吉林四平
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| Posted: 2008-01-17 00:36:11 Post subject: |
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| 黄兄所言,一语中的.后当正之.谢指教 |
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孙继廷
秀才
Joined: 21 Apr 2007
Posts: 115
Location: 吉林四平
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| Posted: 2008-01-17 00:41:40 Post subject: |
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| 晓松言之有理.谢几位版主及诗友 |
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