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酒鬼
贝多芬
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Joined: 17 Mar 2007
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PostPosted: 2008-01-13 15:18:24    Post subject: 酒鬼 Reply with quote

2008.1.11
世界是酒
我是酒杯

有时候
我斟上一口
细细品味

有时候
我抱起酒瓶
一饮而尽

酒醉时
我总把自己
弄的肮脏不堪

酒醒时
我又把它
仔细的清洗

我常想
世界在我体内

是不是纯净透明
是不是原汁原味
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渴望苏醒的日子不会到来

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白水
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Joined: 02 Oct 2006
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PostPosted: 2008-01-13 15:34:11    Post subject: Reply with quote

我是一片沉睡的海
渴望苏醒的日子不会到来

人人都会有醉的时候, 理解
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迪拜
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PostPosted: 2008-01-13 16:55:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

不错
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博弈
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Joined: 21 Dec 2006
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PostPosted: 2008-01-14 04:02:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

不错,这诗只要头两句,其它解释都是多余。 Wink
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贝多芬
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PostPosted: 2008-01-14 19:59:58    Post subject: Reply with quote

后面的反思才是精华啊

是不是纯净透明
是不是原汁原味 Laughing
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博弈
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PostPosted: 2008-01-14 20:21:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

贝多芬 wrote:
后面的反思才是精华啊

是不是纯净透明
是不是原汁原味 Laughing


我挑得严了点,我的意思应该是前两句起得好,但接得不够好。
可以另接。
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