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《16》nobody来报道，收男的吗?

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Posted: 2007-11-27 13:16:21 Post subject: 《16》nobody来报道，收男的吗?

再来报到。主要是想学一下俳句。早年读过芭蕉。Ezra Pound也迷并影响了美国现代诗。他自己的那首Metro就很Haiku. 喜欢其短小机智。望能有机会学习并练习，给老师批改。先谢了！ _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-11-27 13:37:50 Post subject:

我感觉, 你那首小孩哭也很见功力 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2007-11-27 15:52:33 Post subject:

谢岛。那个还行不过功力谈不上。除了年龄渐见功力，其他都欠。感谢kokho电话里这一课，学了很多。静，虚，慈悲。用形象非意象。先记在这里，别忘了。哈哈。就先从口水俳写起吧。也许没有禅，就是禅。就用16吧。高中，大学的学号就是16。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-11-27 16:43:51 Post subject:

欢迎NOBODY,不过学好好象是按报道的顺序排的,16号是不是已经有人了~ 我先来，你是学姐了哈~

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Posted: 2007-11-27 16:56:11 Post subject:

. 热烈欢迎　nobody　帅哥。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-27 16:58:28 Post subject:

。 nobody 来了去了又来了：）我的努力终于渡过黎明前的黑暗。。。你这是让我刻骨铭心的一票！。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-27 16:59:28 Post subject:

。这里帅哥好吃香哟！！！。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:02:51 Post subject:

。给 nobody 一个好方案：）你的作业，可以是四首俳句又符合余光中的结构哟。。那真是两全其美！！。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:22:01 Post subject:

半溪明月 wrote:

欢迎NOBODY,不过学好好象是按报道的顺序排的,16号是不是已经有人了~ Very Happy

我先来，你是学姐了哈~

知道，是老师让选的。老师说空号都能用，给了几个让选，就选了这个。

学姐多关照
老师点名帮喊到
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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:29:09 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

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这里帅哥好吃香哟！！！

。

不帅也能喝点汤吧！哈哈 Laughing

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:30:24 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

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给 nobody 一个好方案：）

你的作业，可以是四首俳句又符合余光中的结构哟。。

那真是两全其美！！

。

好啊。现在家写paper呢，还得两天。泻完再排。 Laughing

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:33:55 Post subject:

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

欢迎NOBODY,不过学好好象是按报道的顺序排的,16号是不是已经有人了~ Very Happy

我先来，你是学姐了哈~

知道，是老师让选的。老师说空号都能用，给了几个让选，就选了这个。

学姐多关照
老师点名帮喊到
别打小报告

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敢情一票值千斤
楼上好榜样
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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:37:28 Post subject:

Lake wrote:

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

欢迎NOBODY,不过学好好象是按报道的顺序排的,16号是不是已经有人了~ Very Happy

我先来，你是学姐了哈~

知道，是老师让选的。老师说空号都能用，给了几个让选，就选了这个。

学姐多关照
老师点名帮喊到
别打小报告

插队底气壮
敢情一票值千斤
楼上好榜样

看到你最开心：）

你也和 nobody 一样，四俳按照余光中的结构：）

给你移送到你的作业簿 ...

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:42:12 Post subject:

. nobody 拜托 “老？” 不用好吗？当心我老人痴呆症发作，忘记给你回帖：）。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:50:35 Post subject:

刚入学就被同学们盯上了，哈哈。小时候上学就受歧视，有“极少数人“认为我考第一是因为老师照顾，而老师照顾是因为我爹当校长。。。看来我得各个击破：今天老师教我俳句时跟我表扬你好多呢， lake 跟你学习！向你致敬！下次black friday你插队到我前面，ok? _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-11-27 17:53:29 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

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nobody 拜托 “老？” 不用好吗？

当心我老人痴呆症发作，忘记给你回帖：）

。。

好，记住了，只在心里默默地叫。口里叫kokho就好了 Laughing

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Posted: 2007-11-27 18:49:37 Post subject:

。谢谢谅解：）我的耳朵、口舌不清 “老？” 老是听成老鼠嘻嘻。。你这么叫“老？” 我会活活给爆民打死的哟哈哈哈：0 。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-11-28 11:12:44 Post subject:

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看来我得各个击破：

下次black friday你插队到我前面，ok? Laughing

Sorry, 没击破。明明是做不到的事吗，你拿来许诺。
我插你前面那还不让人踩扁了？还是跟在你后面，由你冲锋陷阵。
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Posted: 2007-11-28 13:27:54 Post subject:

Lake wrote:

nobody wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

欢迎NOBODY,不过学好好象是按报道的顺序排的,16号是不是已经有人了~ Very Happy

我先来，你是学姐了哈~

知道，是老师让选的。老师说空号都能用，给了几个让选，就选了这个。

学姐多关照
老师点名帮喊到
别打小报告

插队底气壮
敢情一票值千斤
楼上好榜样

很好的口水俳！！！是要经过这个阶段：）

技术上来看，lake 没有全韵。。 nobody 有全韵：）

FIRST ROUND - LAKE 0 VS NOBODY 1

哈哈 Cool

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Posted: 2007-11-28 13:45:31 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

FIRST ROUND - LAKE 0 VS NOBODY 1

这下更惨了，明摆着被照顾 Laughing

，击破代价又变大。
周末争取把作业作完，到时候再请kokho and lake赐教。
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