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文字记载(四首)
闽北阿秀
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PostPosted: 2007-12-14 05:06:36    Post subject: 文字记载(四首) Reply with quote

《文字记载》

这条路,通向
山顶的石塔
两边长满野草和杉林,有几个急弯,还有几个陡坡
走累的时候,总会出现一个亭子
让我坐下,喘口气,称赞设计者之用心
从这条路登上塔顶,眺望远方,抒发感慨的人
肯定很多。但至今
有关纪念这类事的文字
我还没读到

2007-7-18

《慵懒》

独自穿过小巷
两边黄土厚墙,没有一点回音
阳光下的墙头草,柔弱,瘦长,无精打采
如果有花,也是那么小,像稀疏的星星
路上,没有遇到一个人
我的心很平静,不用打招呼,说客套话
不要强装一个转身即逝的笑脸
亭子里,青石板上安睡的大黄狗,肚皮一起一伏
听不见清晨远近相闻的吵闹声
它是村里,最自由的
流浪汉

2007-7-31

《叫醒她》

她醒了,侧着身子
裸露的后背,毫无掩饰的曲线,细腻而光滑
微微舒张的脸庞,还有一些倦意
小溪就在不远处,清澈而温润
我听到缓缓流动的水声,从心里,一种特别的诱惑
阳光下,安逸的鲤鱼,寻觅着水面上的食物
在众多游客眼光里,不惊慌
自由自在

2007-8-2

《回程》

不能隐藏
车轮里的路途。现在是中午12点10分
炙热的天气,一个人孤单的回程,车厢吹着冷气
在闽北,熟悉的地方
此刻,见到的都是陌生人,情绪也无法隐藏
微微摇晃,几点清水
滴在脸上

2007-8-2
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杯中冲浪
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Location: 中国
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PostPosted: 2007-12-14 05:16:17    Post subject: Reply with quote

描述还可以,但最后没有空灵起来。
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半溪明月
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PostPosted: 2007-12-14 06:59:16    Post subject: Reply with quote

《叫醒她》

她醒了,侧着身子
裸露的后背,毫无掩饰的曲线,细腻而光滑
微微舒张的脸庞,还有一些倦意
小溪就在不远处,清澈而温润
我听到缓缓流动的水声,从心里,一种特别的诱惑
阳光下,安逸的鲤鱼,寻觅着水面上的食物
在众多游客眼光里,不惊慌
自由自在

喜欢这首~
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迪拜
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Joined: 31 Oct 2006
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PostPosted: 2007-12-14 20:51:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

总的来说

淡了点

《叫醒她》还可以
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