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春联二副

黄洋界
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Posted: 2009-01-09 01:08:52 Post subject: 春联二副

受秋叶启发,为辞旧迎新,拟春联二副,祝诗友牛年吉祥.提前给大家拜个早年休戚共品游子常怀故土苦乐同尝歌者再赋华章悲喜交集小鼠恋恋难舍去艰苦共建老牛拳拳乐归来 _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

爱松
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Joined: 28 May 2007
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Posted: 2009-01-09 06:07:28 Post subject:

写的好！

白水
大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006
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Posted: 2009-01-09 19:23:43 Post subject:

好意境. 真想听你和秋叶讲讲如何写对联.问好老师

黄洋界
探花

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Posted: 2009-01-10 01:45:14 Post subject:

谢爱松白水评阅.祝二位牛年吉祥 _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

qinghongh
榜眼

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Posted: 2009-01-10 04:03:09 Post subject:

第一副写游子情，第二副辞鼠年迎牛年，很好！黄老师的咏牛诗也是迎新年的，真不错！

秋叶
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Posted: 2009-01-10 11:51:00 Post subject:

黄洋界 wrote:

受秋叶启发,为辞旧迎新,拟春联二副,祝诗友牛年吉祥.提前给大家拜个早年
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黄老师的春联很有味道，学习了。大作须用新声韵读，但是否还有二处失对？供参考。

子
者

喜
苦

黄洋界
探花

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Posted: 2009-01-10 18:24:13 Post subject:

谢庆宏秋叶评阅.秋叶所见极是.指出联中平仄欠妥的两组词现在把'喜'字改作"欣"字.把"者"字改作"人"字.如何? _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

晓松
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Posted: 2009-01-11 09:44:31 Post subject:

小鼠恋恋难舍去老牛拳拳乐归来喜欢. 黄兄快乐!

海南丢
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Posted: 2009-01-11 21:57:49 Post subject:

黄洋界 wrote:

休戚共品游子常怀故土
苦乐同尝歌者再赋华章

悲喜交集小鼠恋恋难舍去
艰苦共建老牛拳拳乐归来

黄老师，我冒昧地改一下，如果不合适，您就使劲儿踢我，嘻嘻``

休戚共品游子常怀故土
苦乐同尝赋诗再写华章

悲喜交集灰鼠拳拳难舍去
和谐共建黄牛恋恋乐归来
_________________

黄洋界
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Posted: 2009-01-12 05:33:23 Post subject:

丢丢,歪歪,袖袖.你们几姊妹都回来了.我们这里该热闹了.更有生气了.谢谢您的改动,写诗作文,常常是当局者迷,旁观者清啊! 祝你们姊妹牛年吉祥! _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

秋叶
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Posted: 2009-01-12 14:15:12 Post subject:

海南丢 wrote:

黄洋界 wrote:

休戚共品游子常怀故土
苦乐同尝歌者再赋华章

悲喜交集小鼠恋恋难舍去
艰苦共建老牛拳拳乐归来

黄老师，我冒昧地改一下，如果不合适，您就使劲儿踢我，嘻嘻``

休戚共品游子常怀故土
苦乐同尝赋诗再写华章

悲喜交集灰鼠拳拳难舍去
和谐共建黄牛恋恋乐归来

再改一字：
悲喜交融灰鼠拳拳难舍去
和谐共建黄牛恋恋乐归来

用旧声韵也可读耶 Laughing

野航
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Posted: 2009-01-12 16:29:51 Post subject:

黄牛恋恋乐归来莫非黄老自喻? _________________ 回归自然回归心灵回归传统

黄洋界
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Posted: 2009-01-13 00:53:28 Post subject:

转益多师是我师.诗友不吝赐教,令我感动.谢谢各位! 在古韵新音互相切磋,互相交流,互相学习.已初显风气. 这种风气真值得提倡! _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

黄洋界
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Posted: 2009-01-13 01:09:03 Post subject:

野航:我虽不敢以牛自喻,而对其品格,则心向往之. _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

沐诗雨
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Joined: 21 Oct 2007
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Posted: 2009-01-20 04:29:23 Post subject:

休戚共品游子常怀故土苦乐同尝歌者再赋华章平仄相对,道出游子彼岸峥嵘与忧乐. 悲喜交集小鼠恋恋难舍去艰苦共建老牛拳拳乐归来也许是真的应该去掉前面四个字.再注意声律,更显新意.问候前辈,安好~~~!

黄洋界
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Posted: 2009-01-20 04:41:46 Post subject:

谢诗雨评阅.祝牛年安康吉祥! _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

暗浮烟
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Joined: 12 Jan 2009
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Posted: 2009-01-23 02:31:45 Post subject:

既是春联，不可以无横披。加上吧

黄洋界
探花

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Posted: 2009-01-24 02:07:32 Post subject:

遵暗浮烟之见,第一副加横批:情牵故国.第二副加横批:送旧图新. 不知当否? _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

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