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白水
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Posted: 2007-02-04 16:55:29 Post subject: 轨

<轨> 天条是锁不住了你扛起一列列火车开进村头的祠堂香格里拉神龛里的公鸡, 开始不安的骚动. 蓝精灵在尖叫, 醒了东方那枚铜币清晨温柔的光如今渗着金属的质, 睫毛启封桃花园的梦了了千年莲座上的美人披一袭金色的袈裟

和平岛
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Posted: 2007-02-04 17:16:12 Post subject:

好象朦胧起来了 _________________ 写诗是为了写更好的诗

杯中冲浪
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Posted: 2007-02-04 17:27:18 Post subject:

主线不明晰，这首诗反而不如浅冬好。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

白水
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Posted: 2007-02-04 20:41:54 Post subject:

两位高手都没看明白说明我这首诗歌有点问题物资生活向现代化迈进, 就连菩萨也想金装了.

kino
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Posted: 2007-02-04 21:13:25 Post subject:

你不说还真没看明白

半溪明月
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Posted: 2007-02-05 02:01:51 Post subject:

kino wrote:

你不说还真没看明白

说了有点点明白~

不过感觉很美的诗~

白水
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Posted: 2007-02-07 08:38:06 Post subject:

kino wrote:

你不说还真没看明白

是吗? 不好意思

白水
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Posted: 2007-02-07 08:39:34 Post subject:

半溪明月 wrote:

kino wrote:

你不说还真没看明白

说了有点点明白~

不过感觉很美的诗~

哈, 看来还是不太明白. Very Happy

月光情怀
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Posted: 2007-02-07 17:07:25 Post subject:

浅浅的表述。深深的隐喻。 _________________ 在心的残缺处去完整诗的美丽 QQ：33179345 msn:wuxizhuo123456@hotmail.com 个人主页：http://hi.baidu.com/xizhuo欢迎光临。

白水
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Posted: 2007-02-09 16:14:40 Post subject:

月光情怀 wrote:

浅浅的表述。深深的隐喻。

谢谢阅评,问好.

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