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宝贝,快点回家(外一首)
李资富
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PostPosted: 2008-06-06 15:42:19    Post subject: 宝贝,快点回家(外一首) Reply with quote

宝贝,快点回家(外一首)

宝贝,快点回家
学校已经放假
没有堆成山的作业
也不用上补习班特长班
现在,爸爸妈妈可以陪你
打扑克、下象棋、打篮球
可以陪你捉螃蟹钓鱼虾

宝贝,快点回家
我们家的电已经接通
妈妈不看连续剧了
爸爸不看体育和新闻了
遥控板由你拿着
你想看啥就看啥

宝贝,快点回家
我们把厨房搬到田野里了
我们把帐篷搭在田野里了
这样,我们一家人
就可以天天野炊露营了
你看,多浪漫啊

宝贝,快点回家
快点回来牵上爸爸和妈妈
我们一起逛街
我们一起散步
我们一起玩游戏
我们一起讲知心话

宝贝,宝贝
请你快点回家

2008年6月5日清晨


请帮我拉一拉这些手

川西北丘陵的断墙残垣中
伸出一只、两只、三只......
无数只手
无数只淳朴、善良、鲜活的手
无数只充满期待睁大眼睛的手
无数只喊哑嗓子嘴角喷血的手

请帮我拉一拉
请帮我拉一拉
请帮我拉一拉这些手
这些是我牵手一生姊妹的手
这些是我相濡以沫妻儿的手
这些是我相守到老父兄的手

现在,除了这些亲人
我们一无所有
在余震不断
烈日和风雨施暴的此刻
请帮我拉一拉
请帮我拉一拉
请帮我拉一拉这些手

2008,请你帮我拉一拉吧

2008年6月5日清晨
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PostPosted: 2008-06-07 00:36:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

提读 耐人回味
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PostPosted: 2008-06-10 03:36:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好朋友!握手!
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PostPosted: 2008-06-10 03:56:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very Happy Very Happy 已经看到,很不错。
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PostPosted: 2008-06-10 20:25:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

很喜欢请帮我拉一拉这些手。。。
个见,某些用词可斟酌。

鲜活 (濒死还鲜活?)
睁大眼睛,喊哑嗓子嘴角喷血(不够朴素)

另外:
淳朴、善良(怎么知道?而且跟主题无关)
牵手一生,相濡以沫,相守到老(有点偏差,一般指配偶,也没大问题,只是或许有更合适的表达)
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