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昨晚两个大家批问好

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Posted: 2008-04-03 19:53:39 Post subject: 昨晚两个大家批问好

修一条平坦的路直通屋檐遇见石子我得把它搬走看见洼坑我要铲土填平那几根草绳也得把它捡起来和被砍倒那几棵挡路的树架起一把火烧了要保证路的平展通顺直到屋檐我们的祖先那些去天堂的亲人在半夜会返回村庄的这是关键的一截路他们都年事已高体弱多病手里的木棍早已变朽路要是不平他们迟迟回不了家他们有可能一不小心摔倒躺下再也起不来了奶奶天热了出来晒晒太阳那时的阳光正好路过屋檐顺便看了您一眼那只失去知觉的腿您只好用另一只腿狠命的和那一丝阳光握手寒暄谁都没去在意您慈祥的笑容后暗藏的那一份馈赠带给您晚年的温暖最后一次是我抱您出去的您双手紧紧拽着我的衣角没来的及向陪您多年的另一丝阳光道别就倒在我的怀里呼吸渐渐归于平静 _________________ 莞君

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Posted: 2008-04-03 23:12:09 Post subject:

两个都不错，后一个更令人印象深刻。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-04-04 00:12:35 Post subject:

最后一次是我抱您出去的您双手紧紧拽着我的衣角没来的及向陪您多人年的另一丝阳光道别就倒在我的怀里呼吸渐以渐归于平静感动！！！！今天是清明节论坛也悲悲的！！

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Posted: 2008-04-04 21:30:44 Post subject:

问好以上二位感谢欣赏握手多批批 _________________ 莞君

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Posted: 2008-04-05 05:44:07 Post subject:

后一首不错～这首伤而不悲，诗里传达出的温馨和怀念读来令人暖暖的～

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Posted: 2008-04-05 18:17:46 Post subject:

最后一次是我抱您出去的您双手紧紧拽着我的衣角没来的及向陪您多年的另一丝阳光道别就倒在我的怀里呼吸渐渐归于平静喜欢这种自然平实的语言, 很令人感动.

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Posted: 2008-04-06 00:41:08 Post subject:

那时的阳光正好路过屋檐年年顺便看了您一眼那只失去知觉的腿 D 您只好用另一只腿狠命的和那一丝阳光握手寒暄大 _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

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Posted: 2008-04-06 03:22:27 Post subject:

感人！

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Posted: 2008-04-06 03:30:43 Post subject:

让人感动的诗,问好莞君兄! _________________ 通联:(065202)京东燕郊开发区高楼镇北京经济技术职业学院鹿向亮 http://blog.sina.com.cn/luxiangliang

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Posted: 2008-04-06 05:54:47 Post subject:

感谢以上的老师和诗友问好你们多批批 _________________ 莞君

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