是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-03-04 20:10:31 Post subject: 三月的爱 (跟悠子学画葫) |
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迎春花偷偷地盛开
仿佛在一个不经意的夜
沉睡了一个冬的气息
也悄悄地在阳光下舒展开
将冷冻的冰雪化解
春风吹过冬天里荒凉的田野
长出一片片嫩绿的蔬菜
湖边的扬柳
也诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆
如美丽的少女跳起舞来
恢复了生机的枝头
默默地孕育着缤纷的七彩
多情的蜜蜂忘记了冬眠中长久的等待
在花丛里飞来忙去地乐开了怀
黄鹂鸟的歌声,婉转地说着爱
原玉:
三月 by 悠子
我知道,春天一定会来
雨后的柳青鹅黄
是我望眼了一冬的色彩
花的心扉一朵一朵的打开
千里外的冰雪,正悄悄融解
临水而立,看春风又渡
花香轻轻漫过烟雨
飘逝的光线穿越低垂的柳丝
岸边窈窕的身影
是谁的景致,若即若离
怎样才能,在桃花睡去之前
在某片绿叶的脉络里
和你相遇
递给你盛满春光的玉盏
告诉你,曾经流失的花语 |
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红袖添乱 秀才

Joined: 09 Jan 2008 Posts: 778
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Posted: 2008-03-04 20:45:45 Post subject: |
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有缘这首真是好和~~我喜欢 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视,
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。 |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-03-05 04:41:08 Post subject: |
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谢谢红袖喜欢。最近看到你老有新作,羡慕的紧。 |
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苏茉儿 秀才
Joined: 31 Dec 2007 Posts: 739
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Posted: 2008-03-05 08:38:32 Post subject: |
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洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! _________________ 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。 |
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 11:50:49 Post subject: |
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迎春花开人人爱! _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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悠子 举人
Joined: 04 Jan 2008 Posts: 1383 Location: US 悠子Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 12:10:28 Post subject: |
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很春天的。 |
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呆哥的女人 童生
Joined: 02 Mar 2008 Posts: 20
呆哥的女人Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 12:40:11 Post subject: |
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恕我直言,
是有缘君这首固然贴题扣图,但是感觉平淡了一些;景物有点散,抒情也不是很有感染力.好像没有什么点睛之笔. _________________ 人称呆嫂 |
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 17:58:51 Post subject: 这段不错哪~ |
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诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆
如美丽的少女跳起舞来 _________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
是有缘Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:30:09 Post subject: Re: 洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! |
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苏茉儿 wrote: |
洋洋洒洒,一路春之歌,结果真好看! |
春天,啊,你真好! |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-03-05 19:31:36 Post subject: Re: 迎春花开人人爱! |
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盗兄,偷偷地摘了几朵了吧? |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
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Posted: 2008-03-05 19:32:25 Post subject: Re: 很春天的。 |
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添了一星半点。 |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
是有缘Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:34:15 Post subject: Re: 恕我直言, ... |
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玩玩,水平有限,莫笑。谢谢您提的宝贵意见。 |
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是有缘 秀才
Joined: 08 Feb 2008 Posts: 741
是有缘Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:37:07 Post subject: Re: 这段不错哪~ |
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詩盜喜裸評 wrote: |
诱惑地掀起了长长的裙摆
如美丽的少女跳起舞来 |
春风让春更迷人心态 |
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爱爱 秀才
Joined: 03 Feb 2008 Posts: 167
爱爱Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:05 Post subject: |
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迎春花偷偷地盛开
哈~~喜欢~~
偷偷的摘一朵~ |
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詩盜喜裸評 进士出身

Joined: 15 May 2007 Posts: 2984 Location: 台湾,台北 詩盜喜裸評Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:38:57 Post subject: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ |
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_________________ 可情可理,去捧就真 |
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苏茉儿 秀才
Joined: 31 Dec 2007 Posts: 739
苏茉儿Collection |
Posted: 2008-03-05 19:42:47 Post subject: Re: 您随意!俺干杯~为了今天的寿星、瘦星!还有我这个兽心~ |
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哈哈,好啦,诗盗班长,也谢谢你。再顿首!各位玩好,茉儿梦去了。 _________________ 默默无言处,盈盈一笑间。 |
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