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詩盜喜裸評
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 11:13:44    Post subject: (独领风骚-图像)雪语 Reply with quote

雪语之前


雪语

风延迟了姿势,你说
轻缓,悄然立于你的肩膀

红点亮了白,你说
挥洒,给一段时间尽情

赋予大地以颜色,你说
美,不局限于局限

烙层次于空间,你说
时间也有终止的一天

羞涩可以组合,你说
开启关注从现在

2008/3/4那天0320

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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 16:00:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

别样的雪。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 16:40:56    Post subject: Reply with quote

雪花本身就是一种语言.
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 18:16:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

哇,在阳台上晕出了好诗。
我在《秋日》里有“赋予大地以金黄色”可和您的
“赋予大地以颜色”媲美 Smile
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 18:39:06    Post subject: Re: 别样的雪。 Reply with quote

是有缘 wrote:
别样的雪。


没有亲眼见过雪,每次写这题材都是瞎掰!
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 18:41:19    Post subject: Re: 雪花本身就是一种语言. Reply with quote

赵福治 wrote:
雪花本身就是一种语言.


赵版!有空来咱们落尘说说话哪。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 18:47:13    Post subject: 那个破阳台就不好再提了!伤城兄闲暇时也往落尘玩玩如何?小弟陪您城墙上吹吹风。 Reply with quote

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哇,在阳台上晕出了好诗。
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那个破阳台就不好再提了!伤城兄闲暇时也往落尘玩玩如何?小弟陪您城墙上吹吹风。依您的《秋日》让我们看看金黄色的美!
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 18:56:55    Post subject: Reply with quote

今年的大雪可谓16年来最大的一次,欢迎朋友们今冬来我这里观雪。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:03:02    Post subject: 喔~谢谢!湖北,俺晓地,湖南的对面。 Reply with quote

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今年的大雪可谓16年来最大的一次,欢迎朋友们今冬来我这里观雪。

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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:07:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

好哇。承蒙失盗盛情,也得走一遭。再过一两个月,空
就比较多一点。 Smile
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:08:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

羞涩可以组合,你说
开启关注从现在

有道理。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:10:16    Post subject: Reply with quote

来看看诗盗。

请你说说,把 “你说” 放在行末的道理。

让我想起了一首英文诗,也是如此。

We real cool. We
Left school. We

Lurk late. We
Strike straight. We

Sing sin. We
Thin gin. We

Jazz June. We
Die soon.
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:11:27    Post subject: Reply with quote

喜欢这标题
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:16:58    Post subject: 再过一两个月?天哪!寿命短一些的就等不到啦! Reply with quote

伤城 wrote:
好哇。承蒙失盗盛情,也得走一遭。再过一两个月,空
就比较多一点。 Smile

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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:19:29    Post subject: 那可得依着道理走!走,走,走走走!一起落尘去游游。 Reply with quote

回到拉萨 wrote:
羞涩可以组合,你说
开启关注从现在

有道理。

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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:32:33    Post subject: 谢谢辣妹!您可以再靠近一点。 Reply with quote

Lake wrote:
来看看诗盗。
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还好我不懂英文!要不给你以为是给偷来的!哈~

实话实说,这作品是给硬掐出来的!因为落尘(独领风骚)单元,我期许自己每个主题都做练习。

雪,没见过!写过一些。这图片找不到切入点,我就自问啦!也他问。所以第一个敲出来的字词就是(你说)。这种模式一般摆在语句的最前端,或有空行的也多。我变换一下形式,将(你说)夹在中间,又加上空行,期待(雪语)有对话的效果。这也就是我回覆湖北冷巉MM=独白也是心语,心语,也是对话啰!

这样!交卷~
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:34:30    Post subject: 喜欢!!只要是白水公主喜欢的,诗盗大放送! Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
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作者也不错哪~
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:47:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢答复,又学了一着。

别装不懂英文,确实有诗盗(版)之嫌。 Laughing
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:48:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

红点亮了白,你说
挥洒,给一段时间尽情

文字后面给出很大的想象空间。

生铁来拜读。问好。
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PostPosted: 2008-03-03 19:55:49    Post subject: Re: 谢谢答复,又学了一着。 别装不懂英文,确... Reply with quote

Lake wrote:
谢谢答复,又学了一着。

别装不懂英文,确实有诗盗(版)之嫌。 Laughing


不懂还能装哪?真是不懂地啦~您板子上的回覆,我都是用股沟翻译地拉!
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