莹雪
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 Posted: 2008-02-23 23:52:37 Post subject: 原创楹联（一） |
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出句：倦怠红装辞岁旧
对句：辛勤翠笔醉年新 |
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黄洋界
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| Posted: 2008-02-24 06:34:44 Post subject: |
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堪称工对,将"旧岁"颠倒为"岁旧",'新年"颠倒为"年新",如此翻新,别具一格,"醉"字传神.
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莹雪
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| Posted: 2008-02-24 15:47:45 Post subject: |
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| 黄洋界 wrote: |
| 堪称工对,将"旧岁"颠倒为"岁旧",'新年"颠倒为"年新",如此翻新,别具一格,"醉"字传神. |
谢谢您的细心点评！我一定继续努力。 |
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郑达夫
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| Posted: 2008-02-27 21:47:15 Post subject: |
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| 黄洋界 wrote: |
| 堪称工对,将"旧岁"颠倒为"岁旧",'新年"颠倒为"年新",如此翻新,别具一格,"醉"字传神. |
欣赏！
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白云
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同感，同欣赏！
说点想法：如果只看出句，这“倦怠”修饰“红装”好象有些直白，如果不用这种表达情绪的词来修饰可能更有味道些。管见啊。
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