maybe 童生
 
  Joined: 31 Dec 2006 Posts: 18
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				 Posted: 2007-01-09 22:34:29    Post subject: for I’m a playboy 请批 | 
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				Poetry, don’t love me 
 
      for I’m a playboy
 
 
Don't ask me to sit to paint
 
I can only brush and leave.
 
Preferring a pet yet don’t
 
Like time-sharing; however,
 
A cup of espresso is what I
 
Can afford to share, in time.
 
 
Don’t teach me new tricks
 
Loyal is not my dog nature
 
As I greet new friends with
 
You and smell their scents.
 
 
Impressionism of love leads
 
Me to a space of exoticness
 
Where I also see images of
 
You in various replications
 
As I was relaxed to choose.
 
 
Accepting agree with what 
 
We disagreed and move on
 
To avoid tearing down the
 
House which hosts no more
 
Guests of honor in evenings
 
Is the last we disagree upon.
 
 
Waking up with thought of 
 
You that gradually mutates
 
To colors in the nature and
 
Feminine attributes of the
 
Goddess is not womanizing
 
For God built the mundane
 
Man unable to stick to you
 
Yet wanting to return home
 
After a tiring, playful stroll
 
Out there—and this is just
 
Another thought awaking.
 
 
Farther and farther I wanted
 
To go, longer and longer my 
 
pen strode, … …
 
Oops, the phone rings and I
 
Think I gotta pick up a call. _________________ could be | 
			 
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		maybe 童生
 
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				 Posted: 2007-01-09 22:36:41    Post subject:  | 
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				Hawaii -- Girls on the beach
 
 
 
 
I’ll tell you this is another piece
 
 
You swim by me like colorful fish
 
Mis-guide my fishing pole's pitch 
 
Do you eventually escape my catch 
 
Or strangle me within arm’s reach
 
 
 
Girls, Don’t just stand on the beach
 
Rings, glittering in the belly scorch
 
Hot as lava, my sweat into a Scotch 
 
The next question is: do I approach
 
 
Gee, sh…
 
Too little time and too many fish
 
Rather get a piercing and tattoo each
 
Than leave emptily, so I preach _________________ could be | 
			 
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		kokho 进士出身
  
  Joined: 30 Nov 2006 Posts: 2642 Location: Singapore kokhoCollection | 
		
		
			
				 Posted: 2007-01-09 23:02:42    Post subject:  | 
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				I like the first one, it is about a dogged determination
 
to express the love for poems
 
 
Hope to see more of your works.
 
 
I can see that you are not a cat person... neither do I.
 
 
. _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌 | 
			 
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		和平岛 举人
  
  Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 1277 Location: Victoria, Canada 和平岛Collection | 
		
		
			
				 Posted: 2007-01-09 23:14:15    Post subject:  | 
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				These two poems follow a similar pattern:
 
 
To catch your attention first, then lead you away, farther and farther away,
 
to nowhere,
 
then suddenly, it ends
 
unexpectly
 
 
I am not too sure about this word, agree, in this sentence:
 
Accepting agree with what 
 
We disagreed and move on 
 
 
might use "agreement" instead?
 
 
Thanks for sharing
 
 
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