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[诗歌关注民生] 《我疯了，因为雪灾》、《冰慌。兵慌》

李智强
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Posted: 2008-01-31 01:52:53 Post subject: [诗歌关注民生] 《我疯了，因为雪灾》、《冰慌。兵慌》

我疯了，因为雪灾一场雪居然冻结了年关和归期生气。却呵不掉一层薄冰。疯，在大雪之外冬天最肆虐的日历上朋友在其中，我的酒在他的钱孔里钱孔被雪花覆盖，届时我只能豪饮寒冷然后心灵麻木，然后发疯冰凉的车票买不到固态的烈酒火车的胸膛因此无从炙热雪太大了，于是灭掉了火焰等待恐怖的黑影践踏自己绵长的脊背经不住冷漠，也不该被白冰湮没但是，火苗正在地下蛰伏。鸣起冲锋哨！哪怕是一声怒吼，或者轻嘘有一个疯子将为你开道…… [雪灾感受二] 冰慌。兵慌壮观航拍：八百里秦川白雪皑皑冰慌。兵慌夜阑卧，我恐慌于白被单覆满了雪花听，以羸弱的老兵身份背负寒夜。剧烈的心跳抖不去一片冷风乘隙入侵了握不住枪戟的僵手老兵的梦注定离不开战争，战场，战马…… 恐惧之前必须策马登高，饥餐冰河辔绳已拴不住心如惊猿，顿生逃意的马儿呼啸的北风预热着冰雕铁马的造型雪皑皑，白色覆盖了雄壮的血色长江早已熄灭的烽火如何复燃？不愿束手就擒愤怒也被冻僵城池消无，复辟将从我的戎雕开始马匹也能载入史册，冰慌里兵慌，心慌孤独而不悲哀 _________________ 【狂到世人皆欲杀】【醉来天子不能传】

迪拜
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Posted: 2008-01-31 17:36:05 Post subject:

用 “当代诗歌的主流风格来描写这次雪灾” 似乎，在某些方面，有欠缺。人嘛，都有“冷暖之心” 昨天我看了“湖南卫视”的特别报道----《倾城送英雄》哭了很长时间太感人了去看一眼这些英雄正因为有了他们我们的亲人才能在“灾害”面前安然无恙。这是“实实在在的冷暖人心”。用简单点的风格，可能更好。

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Posted: 2008-02-02 01:58:54 Post subject:

要提，都来看。！ _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

杯中冲浪
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Posted: 2008-02-02 19:49:02 Post subject:

自如的语言。看到这首诗，才真正体会到雪灾的含义。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

李智强
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Posted: 2008-02-05 04:42:37 Post subject:

谢迪拜老师、金金、冲浪兄。多批评哦~！ _________________ 【狂到世人皆欲杀】【醉来天子不能传】

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Posted: 2008-02-09 04:13:23 Post subject:

民生, 民情. 令诗人动容. 问好新春

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Posted: 2008-02-09 05:36:10 Post subject:

有一个疯子将为你开道 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2008-02-10 04:59:12 Post subject:

迪拜 wrote:

用“当代诗歌的主流风格来描写这次雪灾” 似乎，在某些方面，有欠缺。
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同感.智强是语言成熟,流畅.学习了.

李智强
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Posted: 2008-02-18 04:35:00 Post subject:

握谢白水、NOBODY、陈兄。请大家多批多指教哦 _________________ 【狂到世人皆欲杀】【醉来天子不能传】

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