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Posted: 2007-12-09 22:46:14 Post subject: 赋梅二首

赋梅二首（一）深冬何处觅芳菲? 荒漠桥边访艳梅。不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。（二）红梅赋罢唱白梅，冰作肌肤玉作髓。阵阵冲天香雪海，云霄深处唤春雷。

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Posted: 2007-12-10 02:05:34 Post subject:

不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。 ——好！

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Posted: 2007-12-11 01:06:36 Post subject: Re: 赋梅二首

[quote="赋梅二首（一）深冬何处觅芳菲? 荒漠桥边访艳梅。不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。晓松兄“荒漠桥边访旧梅”是否更深一层？供参考。

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Posted: 2007-12-11 02:28:07 Post subject:

阵阵冲天香雪海，云霄深处唤春雷。太棒了！ _________________ 一只秋天里的风铃，尽情的感受风的吹拂。摇曳中，让风有了色彩，有了声音，更有了自己的形象；

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Posted: 2007-12-11 03:32:20 Post subject:

阵阵冲天香雪海，云霄深处唤春雷。写出了气势，欣赏。 _________________ 人生乃是一面镜子，在其中认识自己。

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Posted: 2007-12-11 09:04:52 Post subject:

与勿妄言鱼兄有同感, 既写梅香雪海,又写斗雪迎春.佳句 . _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

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Posted: 2007-12-11 09:49:50 Post subject:

不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。一攀,一争,人格化了.梅花写活了！

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Posted: 2007-12-11 16:55:03 Post subject:

大气之梅！

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:06:11 Post subject:

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荷梦 wrote:

不与牡丹攀富贵，
独争岁首第一魁。
——好！

谢过荷梦赏读。问好！

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:16:25 Post subject: Re: 赋梅二首

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秋叶 wrote:

[quote="赋梅二首

（一）
深冬何处觅芳菲?
荒漠桥边访艳梅。
不与牡丹攀富贵，
独争岁首第一魁。

晓松兄“荒漠桥边访旧梅”是否更深一层？供参考。

多谢秋叶兄关注。“旧梅”的确要深一层。我最先是“访红梅”，但红不合律，最后用了艳字。我希望能多听到一些这样的建议。握个~

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:19:13 Post subject:

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勿妄言 wrote:

阵阵冲天香雪海，
云霄深处唤春雷。

太棒了！

谢谢勿妄言的到访！希望多看到你的作品~

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:24:41 Post subject:

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与勿妄言鱼兄有同感,

既写梅香雪海,又写斗雪迎春.佳句 .

黄兄，多谢！提点建议才是。多多保重~

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:31:42 Post subject:

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不与牡丹攀富贵，
独争岁首第一魁。

一攀,一争,人格化了.梅花写活了！

冰清老师，您近来可好！过誉了。特喜欢您的作品，谢谢~

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Posted: 2007-12-11 22:57:48 Post subject:

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大气之梅！

qinghongh兄，谢谢！握手~

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Posted: 2007-12-11 23:08:26 Post subject:

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游向高原的鱼 wrote:

阵阵冲天香雪海，
云霄深处唤春雷。

写出了气势，欣赏。

问候高原兄！多谢赏读！握！

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Posted: 2007-12-23 15:30:34 Post subject:

问好晓松兄！祝圣诞快乐！ _________________ 回归自然回归心灵回归传统

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Posted: 2007-12-26 16:53:18 Post subject:

问候野航老弟！祝老弟新年快乐！

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Posted: 2008-01-29 15:11:41 Post subject:

“不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。” 好句，好气势！问好。

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Posted: 2008-01-29 20:45:41 Post subject:

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“不与牡丹攀富贵，独争岁首第一魁。”
好句，好气势！
问好。

多谢仁兄赏评！远握~

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