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[原禅诗创] 禅的危机等诗选。。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-04 14:30:51    Post subject: [原禅诗创] 禅的危机等诗选。。 Reply with quote



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.   凤凰的畸变
.        kokho
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唱着四季和清风轻送浆声飘花飞月到江南的美
一只白鹦鹉被仙女送上了森林最幽深的树巅

“披着金光三天,只要接受一百只鸟儿的祝福
就变成他们的凤凰吧,他们的歌颂也将成就了你的颜色!”

白鹦鹉告别了她的男朋友 -
“我不能只为纯洁而空白。。”

金光照遍了森林每一个角落,也带来了各种飞鸟走禽
“金光是夕阳的美丽!” 小野鸭呱呱吵
“金光比朝露更晶滢。。”天上的雄鹰说
“金光比收成的麦田还波涛起伏?”麻雀们也叽咋起来

白鹦鹉犹豫了
夕阳近黄昏;朝露见阳消;麻雀的叽咋好烦的哟。。

还好有只黑鸟儿说了 “我们是酷雅,会飞遍森林
会为您找到最美好的祝福。”
整个森林就飞起了 黑色的翅膀
黑色的翅膀就飞了三天也遮盖了金光!

当仙女再来的时候,森林就多了一只
乌鸦的女王!

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PostPosted: 2006-12-04 21:48:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

从金光到黑暗
描写细致生动
加了一些象征性的小动物
情趣盎然
Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2006-12-04 23:04:16    Post subject: Reply with quote

和平岛 wrote:
从金光到黑暗
描写细致生动
加了一些象征性的小动物
情趣盎然
Very Happy


谢谢品读 :))

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PostPosted: 2006-12-05 16:59:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

美丽的童话, 别有一种情调
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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 08:56:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

一幅好画啊,什么时候我也这么画上一幅。可惜我没学过油画,无从下笔。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 10:50:53    Post subject: Reply with quote

月光 wrote:
美丽的童话, 别有一种情调


谢谢品读 :))

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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 10:51:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

维鹿延 wrote:
一幅好画啊,什么时候我也这么画上一幅。可惜我没学过油画,无从下笔。


多来坐坐 :))


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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 18:02:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

有个性,有意蕴。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-07 12:11:04    Post subject: Reply with quote

了因大兄 wrote:
有个性,有意蕴。


谢谢品读 ;))


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PostPosted: 2006-12-07 21:02:17    Post subject: 奇怪 Reply with quote

这副画,前景用色反差巨大,对背景光线(即时间)的处理也异于常人。七七的眼睛看见的是白夜的狂欢,是夕照中强烈呈现的平安寂静,和隐身其中的点点厄运

kohko诗,童话式叙事,给出了意外的故事情节:乌鸦的女王。 这在前述所表之童趣、天真、烂漫之后,似乎猛然锥破虚构,回归残酷现实——但kohko的现实,嘿嘿,仿佛另一层现实。它是虚构的现实。它是kohko的。

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PostPosted: 2006-12-15 04:44:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏kokho的诗歌,需要走进kokho诗歌的世界,凤凰的畸变是一个超现实的寓言.
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PostPosted: 2006-12-17 14:20:26    Post subject: Re: 奇怪 Reply with quote

七小姐 wrote:
这副画,前景用色反差巨大,对背景光线(即时间)的处理也异于常人。七七的眼睛看见的是白夜的狂欢,是夕照中强烈呈现的平安寂静,和隐身其中的点点厄运

kohko诗,童话式叙事,给出了意外的故事情节:乌鸦的女王。 这在前述所表之童趣、天真、烂漫之后,似乎猛然锥破虚构,回归残酷现实——但kohko的现实,嘿嘿,仿佛另一层现实。它是虚构的现实。它是kohko的。

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谢谢 七七  Laughing Very Happy Laughing
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PostPosted: 2006-12-17 14:21:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

杨光 wrote:
欣赏kokho的诗歌,需要走进kokho诗歌的世界,凤凰的畸变是一个超现实的寓言.


杨光 谢谢品读 ;))


多来坐坐。。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-20 19:46:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

禅是什么?丛林里的那些鸟儿可能只有一扇门,而我们,有太多,所以永不解脱。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-20 22:45:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

绝世孤独 wrote:
禅是什么?丛林里的那些鸟儿可能只有一扇门,而我们,有太多,所以永不解脱。


禅 就是 门在心里!

可能如你所说 很多扇;

也可能 只有一扇 那就是进步了。。。

如果 一扇都没 那就成功了?

济公 说 什么门? 我讨饭从来看不到门 
。    是门外讨?还是门内讨?还是门槛上讨?

。    我只管来去自如 !!!

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PostPosted: 2006-12-21 20:46:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

当仙女再来的时候,森林就多了一只
乌鸦的女王!

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PostPosted: 2006-12-21 22:53:03    Post subject: Reply with quote

童话预言。这是另类的美食。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-26 04:43:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho wrote:
绝世孤独 wrote:
禅是什么?丛林里的那些鸟儿可能只有一扇门,而我们,有太多,所以永不解脱。


禅 就是 门在心里!

可能如你所说 很多扇;

也可能 只有一扇 那就是进步了。。。

如果 一扇都没 那就成功了?

济公 说 什么门? 我讨饭从来看不到门 
。    是门外讨?还是门内讨?还是门槛上讨?

。    我只管来去自如 !!!

Cool Laughing Laughing


----真的悟得很透彻!
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PostPosted: 2007-01-01 12:11:46    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢 

静冰 司马策风 荷梦

朋友们的点评。。
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