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《耳语》《油菜花》
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PostPosted: 2006-11-15 03:53:41    Post subject: 《耳语》《油菜花》 Reply with quote

《耳语》

夜,部分被树撑开:
部分让灯侵占。
喧噪之外,隐于寂静的弥漫
让夜柔软沉静。

耳朵里,小雨的手和白玉兰的身体
似曾相识,又相互探索。
而闪电,一个偶然的
自上而下的耳语
让夜瞬间亮了十里。

你醒着,你醉着,用沉默
用眼中,那一片
在明亮中触摸万物的小雨。

2006/11/11

《油菜花》

油菜花把我藏了起来。
油菜花一片干净的回忆。

让蜜蜂再多一些,让有翅的心脏
嗡嗡的畅想,自由自在的飞。

现在,让回忆
沿着油菜花的仰望,往回飞
二十一年。

你可以看见,十九岁的我
拍拍屁股上的尘土
从油菜花中站起来。

油菜花一样。

2006/11/11
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PostPosted: 2006-11-15 07:57:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

形象生动
通体透明

挂起来
请朋友们分享和评说一下
Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2006-11-15 17:53:39    Post subject: <油菜花>写的不错 Reply with quote

<油菜花>写的不错

有韵味
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PostPosted: 2006-11-15 19:49:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

语言极具亲和力,有磁场感。支持加精。
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PostPosted: 2006-11-15 20:44:14    Post subject: Reply with quote

平静的叙述,语言景致
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PostPosted: 2006-11-16 01:32:48    Post subject: 轻松,柔软,优美! Reply with quote

喜欢欣赏!问好兄弟!欢迎多来交流!
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PostPosted: 2006-11-16 10:10:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

《油菜花》看似平白,实有深意。

另提醒:
自由自在的飞--
其“的”应用“地”
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PostPosted: 2006-11-17 15:46:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

精美!
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PostPosted: 2006-11-18 19:03:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好楼上各位,请各位多指点。
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PostPosted: 2006-11-19 04:22:54    Post subject: 问好! Reply with quote

维鹿延 wrote:
《油菜花》看似平白,实有深意。



能讲讲吗?
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PostPosted: 2006-11-19 20:05:38    Post subject: Reply with quote

情到细微处方动人。学习好诗。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 17:53:40    Post subject: Re: 问好! Reply with quote

半溪明月 wrote:
维鹿延 wrote:
《油菜花》看似平白,实有深意。



能讲讲吗?


问好,两位。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-06 17:54:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

左岸 wrote:
情到细微处方动人。学习好诗。


问好,左岸。多批多指点。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-07 03:46:27    Post subject: Reply with quote

喜欢油菜花一诗。
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PostPosted: 2006-12-07 12:04:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

《油菜花》

油菜花把我藏了起来。
油菜花一片干净的回忆。

让蜜蜂再多一些,让有翅的心脏
嗡嗡的畅想,自由自在的飞。

现在,让回忆
沿着油菜花的仰望,往回飞
二十一年。

你可以看见,十九岁的我
拍拍屁股上的尘土
从油菜花中站起来。

油菜花一样。

《》这首超精彩 :)) 问好!


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PostPosted: 2006-12-08 06:50:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

很可爱的两段小诗,欣赏!
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PostPosted: 2006-12-18 00:12:32    Post subject: 两相比较 Reply with quote

将作者的两首诗歌比较回发现,第一首较为做作,人工痕迹重;《油彩花》

反而童心一片,语言自然,形象鲜明,情景思的流动跳跃极其自然,优美而动

人。

发呼天籁回归天籁,始成好诗 。
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PostPosted: 2013-07-16 09:17:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

在第390页找到的。后边的评论也很吸引人。
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